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2005-09-25, 16:04
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"Symphony of Whispers"
"Symphony of Whispers"
Jacob Fitzlaff
9/24/05
A melody overshadows the darkness of this world.
It brings me peace.
And I meditate.
Despite the storm I can hear surrounding me.
I am calm.
I am one.
And the melody continues to play.
Weaving its soft, gentle, forgiving hands through my hair.
Telling me everything will be okay.
Telling me that all is well and all will be well.
Assuring me safety.
Am I mesmerized by this tune?
I think I am.
My soul is perched atop a mountain.
And the valley is peaceful.
No one lives in this valley.
No evil has ever touched it.
Of this, I am proud.
Proud that within my mind, peace dwells.
Indeed it does dwell,
So righteous and free.
Not free by man’s laws,
But free of man’s laws.
And I am forgiven.
The melody is climaxing now.
Whispering the song of the valley.
And playing the strings of morality.
Playing the strings, for humanity.
It falls soothing upon my ears.
For I am weary.
Yes, I am weary.
But I won’t die, I have reason to live.
And she knows it so.
And thus, we sit hand in hand.
Atop the mountain.
Letting the symphony of whispers ease us slowly into oneness.
For if love is not one,
Then love is not at all.
And we meditate.
And we are calm.
And we are one.
As the melody lulls us into sleep.
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2005-09-25, 16:31
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Very pretty piece. The only thing that threw me was the introduction of the "she" midway. I thought I had an idea of where that was coming from. I was right.  It had a lot of elements that I could relate too so that made it even better. Thanks for sharing it.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-09-23, 03:09
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Awesome,for a punk.
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2006-09-23, 04:04
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Originally Posted by Requiem
Awesome,for a punk.
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You have no idea what punk lyrics look or sound like.
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2006-09-23, 14:12
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FUck of TM im talking a Tulvox is a punk rocker, you duury fucking cunt.
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2006-09-23, 14:14
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Originally Posted by Requiem
FUck of TM im talking a Tulvox is a punk rocker, you duury fucking cunt.
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Now now, such language. 
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...Its very annoying to keep having to hear some socially-disabled teen come on these boards talking about all the drugs he's started doing so that he can maybe grasp onto some kind of positive response so he feels better about himself and what he's doing.
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2006-09-23, 14:16
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Im only saying i talk to him on MSN and probably know him better than you do.
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2006-09-23, 14:28
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Im only saying i talk to him on MSN and probably know him better than you do.
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Whats your point? It still wasn't punk lyrics.
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2006-09-23, 17:20
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He said 'not bad, for a punk,' not 'not bad for punk.' Big difference. So let's all calm down. I don't really even think these are lyrics.
And, to be honest, while one of my favorite lyricists is punk, in general punk isn't have particularly strong when it comes to lyrics. Then again, neither is metal.
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2006-10-05, 06:35
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Those are really good man. Nice job.
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2006-10-06, 13:40
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yes, nice job well written poetic and smart. Good job, sounds like a light prog metal song.
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