
2005-09-24, 02:22
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Home is where the <3 is
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That was prefect. I have absolutely no complaints. One read I got the meter and the flow was quite good. I liked the way you used certain words to punch it once in awhile. Really cool piece. It had a Metallica feel to it to me. Something that you'd want the words very legible to.
I wish we didn't need soldiers, but they come in handy for more than just wars. I think the States are really finding that out for sure now. But as far as the song goes it was a-okay. 
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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