Looking down upon me.
I feel the same way too.
You know your better than me.
But whats that mean to you?
Nothing special really.
It's always been like this.
You're used to being greater.
And so am I like this.
I've lost all faith in life.
So take it as it comes.
There's nothing left to hope for.
Staring into this gun.
You think it works in waves.
Give then take a little.
Then realise it's all give.
There is no happy middle.
When you think you've tumbled farthest,
The waves keep crashing still.
Bludgeoned to the coral reef
A sea with an urge to kill.
So as you look down at me,
Know I've nothing to lose.
The murderous thing before me,
Won't give my right to choose.
It thinks that it's an avatar,
Tells me when I can say,
While you're gaining something,
I know we're all dead anyway.
So point the rifle to my head
And suppose you're causing pain,
Keep on running on the high
You get from minor reign.
Press the barrel to my head,
All I have is bare.
Go ahead and take my life,
Cos it's all fucked and I don't care.

There are 2 spots where the meter was disrupted that threw it off a little for me. One was --I know we're all dead anyway. --That could be remedied by leaving out the "I know" if you'd want to. That's implied anyways.
The second one was the last line although I don't think it's that crucial. It gives it a more flat-lined feel whereas the rest of the piece, because of the meter, has a heartbeat quality to it.
A line that didn't seem to make sense to me was "Tells me when I can say. " That confused me because it didn't seem to relate to the line above or below to me.
I liked the way you used the imagery throughout and the added element of the water was really well worded to me. I did have to look up "avatar" because other than the familiar pictures by our names that's the only time I've ever seen it used.
Very nice job on this piece even with the forboding atmosphere. Is it a song or poem?

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Hmm, poem it must be. But could probably write music to it anyway easily.

I like the last line, because as you said - it has that heartbeat timing. And the last line gives a THE END feeling, ya know what i mean? Just a stop.

I really liked that piece

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not bad, finally got around to reading it

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Sounds good. Easy to read, but fascinating and a bit abstract. Nice job!