dead and alone i sit and wait for the call of death.needle is now piercing thru my pale dead skin as blood is been shed oh how i stare in satisfaction seeing the blood spill with so much sanity.i am dying now nevermore will i have to stand in darkness all alone craving for the death wings to take me away nevermore will i have to morn for you my dead love for we will meet now in death in the blood stained paradise of broken dreams.
a death for every loving hart like mine and yours may hell now brake lose i wrote my thesis b4 it all died in my head.
in memory of my dad

Generic/10

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Looks like something you'd see on 98% of live journals

I was wondering about the dedication part. I was hoping to see some interaction to know if that was part of the piece or if it was a memorial.
I wouldn't comment on it until I'd know.

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what def said we can't do.

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Well, it could be poetic written what I'd call lazily. If it's an actual tribute that's one thing, but if it's a creative piece, you're right.

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well, not to be spiteful or course, if it were a tribute, it could have been alot more meaningful and creative

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You just can't help but push it can you haha.

It was decent,5/10 I would say.

Hmm, well, I'd much prefer some formating, you know, there is a little button called Enter, and there is a little button called Shift, unless you're one of them manky Mac using bastards then I have no idea.

How can you wait for death when you're dead already?
The repetition of death and dead and nevermore (never use one long word twice so closely) is somewhat irritating.
Blood stained paradise of broken dreams sounds a little gothmo to be, but cool nonetheless.
What's with the title?

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Sounds like stuff I read back in Jr High on the "gothgirls" notebooks.

I'm sure it's awesome for some people.

More power to ya.

You brought this back from 19 days ago to call the author a goth girl? You're an arrogant cunt. I despise you.

I didnt call her anything.
In fact I said nothing derogatory....only related an experience.

Pull your pants up BOY....your wee wee is showing again.

Despite that last bit being absolutely retarded, i'm going to disregard it. You related his poem, which was about his dad, to a goth girl's live journal. Comments can't get much more derogatory or patronizing. Please, refrain from reviving dead threads in order to spread your filth. We don't need you in these forums. Kindly follow your parents' example and die in a not-so-tragic car "accident".

Piss off Pizzaboy.
I can post anywhere I like and have any opinion I like.

You're simply a puss.
You and your fag crew ruin threads insulting people.....just like you've done here.

Really! And SHE pm-d me and told me what it was about. And it is an old tribute piece. I think if there had been more conversational input here from her that would have been more out in the open.
Rapture, I'm not going to argue about what you said but that comment about Bia's parents was a distasteful low blow. The only time I ever really bitched to an admin about something someone said was like like that and they got banned.
You know as well as anyone that there's no bounds on who comments or posts here.

EDIT: Just read at chitchat. Glad that was resolved.

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WOW nicely done , real nice thing to say , Boy you got class NOT .
Man how could you say that ,tsk tsk tsk .

It's cool...heard that several times in my life...no biggie..we can drop it and not post about it again here. Ruinings another thread is disrespectful.....we can alway all argue like dorks in RTT where it belongs.

It's funny...I still think the poem is creative....but what was misunderstood was that when I said it reminded me of things I read by the Goth girls in Jr High....it was assumed that was some type of insult.
For the record....the goth girls were always cool with me and mostly very creative.....I was too into Metal & Punk to follow....but I'd rather hang with a goth chick than a redneck white trash inbred tard.
Most of the gothy chicks wrote deep poetry but by Highschool had mostly abandoned elsewhere as I went to a massively redneck Nascar loving....bible thumping hisghschool and was fortunate enough to change my options in location or simply quitting....like most of the cool kids eventually did.

So yes....I liked the poem though it isnt my style.....but like I said,

More power to ya

The general stereotype is that goth girls write bad poetry. Honestly, this was clearly an insult, don't try to save face.

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Stereotypes are for morons.

No one thinks for me.

Wow you're such a rebel!

Honestly, you missed my point completely. If you compare someone's work to the works of a group, people generally think of what is generally known about the group (aka the general stereotype), without knowing your personal opinion about the said group, so it very clearly came out as an insult, and you only tried to save face after people belittled you for it.

Fuck this place.

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Not everyone thinks just like you...get over yourself.

Actually, she is entirely correct.... get over yourself.

How fucking old are you guys?