Breaking down the walls of confrontation.
I open my mouth and right away you attack me ferociously.
I scream in agony, pulling at my many locks of hair
You stare at me questioningly.
Curled up in a corner, I start to see what's right and wrong, and I begin to laugh.
That thought sent you flying to the ceiling fan.
I left the mess for your parents.
Feeling uplifted, I go home for a relaxing meal of red wine and your limbs.
Your tongue tastes best raw.

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Bravo

I think its cool

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EWW!! That was great! But why do parents (translates to "I") get stuck cleaning up the mess? Don't you have a dog that can clean things like that up? Maybe not what's on the ceiling, but every little bit could help.

Flow was great on this and so was the wording. It was awful and made me giggle at the same time. Cool.

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You spelled "piece" wrong.

dude, if you want to be seen as manly, dont talk about your locks of hair :P

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Oh my, 'i' before 'e' except after 'c'.


Tranny--you have seen his hair, haven't you? Locks can be manly.

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ive seen his ridiculous hair yes

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He has cool hair. You're just jealous because you don't have locks like his!!

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hehe, thanks alot

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my hair would is very very very very straight. itd look stupid

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Transient's just a hard man to please, when it comes to presenting works of art for any kind of appraisal.

Trust me, I would know.





ye stingy bastard

youll almost never hear from me "sounds good keep it up"

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Sorry, but that is a HUGE ripoff of Lord Worm's style. Could have been worse though I guess. It's kinda like Lord Worm gone a bit.... well.... metalcore is the only word I can think of.

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yeah it really is lord worm. i left the mess for your parents...etc

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Well, I'm not familiar with Lord Worm other than seeing it mentioned on here once in awhile, but I hope this isn't such a blatant rip-off that it's a copyright infringement. It's one thing to be inspired by something, but it's another to take anothers' work and claim it as your own.

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Straight hair is the sexiest!

he never wrote any songs like this but i guess you could say it's a bit like him i wasn't trying to sound like him.. this is to you too cloaca. i didnt think it sounded like lord worm. but its definitely not close enough that he could sue me.. i didnt get inspired by any songs, i thought of it all by myself

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Which is a good thing ...

Why thank you!

I'm teasing ya.

If the hair looks clean, nice, and touchable I don't care color or length. When my kid shaves his I rub his head because it feels like velvet. Bob had curls to die for. The old man has big waves in his.

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my hair is so straight...when it was medium longish it just like laid there

anyways


back to topic

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It's no copyright infringement on Worm or anything like that. If you put even one latin word in it it might be though .

However, the sort of "setting the scene, then sudden blunt statement" thing you've got going on in this piece is a shiteload like Lord Worm's stuff, especially on Cryptopsy's "Blashpemy Made Flesh". Allow me to give an example for the foolish people who have yet to discover the joys of Cryptopsy:

Pathological Frolic

"Who is this Geoffrey?
All I see is this cold cadaver
Why is this Geoffrey
lying in puddles of pus on a gurney?
Tell me of this Geoffrey,
this boy with a noose around his neck;
More about Geoffrey:
why is he wearing his mother's bra?

How old was Geoffrey?
At a guess, I'd say
about twelve or thirteen;
He died accidentally
from auto-erotic asphyxiation;
He'd been masturbating...
our little stiff still has one on
and it's been one week!

The resurrection men
took their sweet time
Cross-dressed fruit:
what a way to die!
Now he's ours:
the apple of our eve;

Fetch the dead sphincter:
cold green meat
How did his ass taste?
Tender and sweet...

AND THEN WE FUCKED IT..."

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Oh my. Those are most delightful lyrics. I'll rush right out and get a copy for my next dinner party with mom and the family.

The setting/ blunt statement thing isn't a rarity so I wouldn't say that's enough to condemn nHoE's piece. I've used it myself. It seems pretty original to me.

And there ain't no fool like an old fool!

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Pathological Frolic

that was genius.....

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heh that it was. possibly lord worm's most warped song.

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