This is actually a happy/sappy song, picture this with music along the lines of Insomnium or Dark Tranquillity. It's also for two vocalists.It's very wishy washy, so spew warning for the ones who can't stand that type of crap.

Vox 1 (Male?)
What do I have for you to offer
Except my lonely heart,
This twisted pain,
this everlasting sadness?
My love, you're tearing me apart...

What do I have for you to cherish,
Except my barren soul,
The ceaseless tears,
This neverending madness?
What made your heart so surely set on me?

Chorus
Your Darkness Eternal
Is drawing me in
And you are everything to me,
Your Beauty Infernal
Intoxicating Me
I can't be anything for you...

Vox 2 (Female?)
What can I do to cure your heartache?
To mend your heart,
To dry your tears,
To put your soul together?
I would do anything, my heartbroken angel...

Why do you shy away and leave me?
Oh please don't go,
to me you are perfection
and I would spend eternity with you.

Chorus
Your Darkness Eternal
Is drawing me in
And you are everything to me,
Your Beauty Infernal
Intoxicating Me
I would do anything for you...

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For as blatantly lovesick as this was I didn't think it was half bad. It could even be looked at from a differnt perspective as flirting with the afterlife if you had a little more in it that hinted that way. The first line sounds awkward to me. "What do I have for you to offer" would sound more logical as "What do I have to offer you ..." I understand what you mean and why you said it that way, but it sounds like the guy is figuring out what she can offer that he has himself. You could make this very appealling to "romantic metalheads" with the right music. Something very melodic, but driven.

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Kinda reminds me of something Norther would do.

I like it