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Old 2005-07-22, 10:12
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i wrote these lyrics for this song
i think they fit pretty nice.

Here in this bottemless pit you'll be thrown
down to the center of earth
Falling into the malicious depths
your screams will never be heard

Inferno! - That's where you'll lie
Hell! - That's where you'll die
Satan! - Your future is clear
Death! - Always stay here

Convict for your sinful deeds
now the price must be paid
To all those harmless organisms
you had to mutilate

Inferno! - That's where you'll lie
Hell! - That's where you'll die
Satan! - Your future is clear
Death! - Always stay here

Years gone by for your body to rot
you had to get used to your pain
This doesn't pay back all those people you've slain
Now you'll be reduced back to snot

Inferno! - That's where you'll lie
Hell! - That's where you'll die
Satan! - Your future is clear
Death! - Always stay here

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Old 2005-07-22, 11:20
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eath?

sounds a little bit cheesy to me... like iron maiden cheezy. not the trash it was meant to fit IMO
 
Old 2005-07-22, 12:04
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earth, sorry.

iron maiden? haha, right...
 
Old 2005-07-22, 12:11
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Reduced back to snot? Oh, niggah, pleeeease!!! That made me smile. Use the 2 middle lines as alliteration and don't rhyme the last line with the first. You didn't do it anywhere else so it's not like you're breaking a pattern.
I didn't think it was too bad. A little basic in idea, but it was structured pretty well. I think it would be highly growl-along-able because of the nature of the lyrics. At least with the music you posted. That was cool.
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Old 2005-07-22, 16:05
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the lyrics we're nowhere near as good as the song, and those lyrics werent too bad
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Old 2005-07-22, 21:52
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the lyrics we're nowhere near as good as the song, and those lyrics werent too bad

so....that means......thanks man!

yeah i'm sorry im not as good at writing (dark) lyrics as i am at writing music but i still personally think its ok

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