2005-07-22, 12:11
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Home is where the <3 is
Posts: 8,881
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Reduced back to snot? Oh, niggah, pleeeease!!! That made me smile. Use the 2 middle lines as alliteration and don't rhyme the last line with the first. You didn't do it anywhere else so it's not like you're breaking a pattern.
I didn't think it was too bad. A little basic in idea, but it was structured pretty well. I think it would be highly growl-along-able because of the nature of the lyrics. At least with the music you posted. That was cool.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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