Man, I enjoyed writing this, I hope you guys enjoy reading it!

Bard of Satan

Drunk and poor beneath the band
Of city lights and blessed rain
Where his dreams take him anywhere
This time to the void

A savage beast that, when slept
And dawned this poor man shall die
Deeds of flesh made no surrender
From the forest of his dreams

His blood ran cold as darkness
Came, carried by what silence
Brings. With black wings of iron clad
The dark man, he came to me

In my dreams I see myself sitting
Sitting atop my Hellish throne
My fever rages and shadows stir
As the flowing prime of night begins

Nightly, as the moon lit fear
Into a dark crevice to maime
No fear, nor pain shall blindly
find and discourage me

Soon I must find in myself
A path for which to take
Toward the evil wicked world
Idealist, if at all a world of men

Dim red fog soon blinds my way
Twisting into a maze of shit
Where blisters rage and darkness
days of purgatory reign

Lost and stripped of my last hope
Languished to the blinded deep
Into the black abyss I shall be
Just a memory, a story told

Idealist, it's sad to say I am
Where here I'll make my work
Telling stories about the past
When this man died, a long time ago

Who am I, who are we
but just a name, carried by
What silence brings
From the Devil's Dictionary

Listen carefully to how I speak
Warm as blood of red and flame
Listen carefully to how i speak
Black as hell where fires fight

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Now that's the powers' that I really get into. Cool piece. The word "shit" in there is debateable, but given the context of the piece I think it could probably stay there. Even "abyss" which is one of my least favorite words sounded fine. Maybe that's because it wasn't used at the end of a line for a rhyme. It sounded very much like a Pantera song to me. The meter was good and I could hear a melody line through most of it.
Is this a song or poem? I think it would make a darn good song, but let those words shine in it.
Nice one.

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Pantera? Stop doing dandelions metal mom.

Reminds me of Iron Maiden.

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Faggy lyrics.
It sounded to you like Pantera lyrics?? You must be def or can't read.

Faggy spelling...

Nice work powers!

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Well i'm still learning english. But it doesn't change the fact that these lyrics sucks.

you suck.

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I've been reading for about 41 years now, thank you. And I think it sounds like Pantera even though I might be a bit deaf from having my stereo too loud when I was younger. So learn from your elders.

newHELL'--I'm so darn disappointed in you!!!! As much as you yakkity-yak on here which I don't really mind, but that's all you have to say? You have the perfect opportunity to say something really worthwhile to make you look like you are being more productive and maybe help someone else and that's all you say? And it isn't even a yea or nay about whether you liked the piece or not???? I'm appalled!!!
I think it's hammertime for you!

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i'm sorry L'B, i'm dissapointed i wasn't thinking. those lyrics were well thought about, i really got into them. they were well written and a good read, and medicine man just rendered anger in me.

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That's cool. I'm glad you tore yoursef away from Family Guy long enough to comment.

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You wish.

This is the most replies to a lyric I've written in a long time, usually lbxxx is the only one to comment. Too bad Medication Man is too young to understand them. Ya know, you are off to a bad start here--however henceforth be considered an incompetent human catamite who likes to eat the hair off female cows' asses, I suggest you start adding to your pathetic little internet comments than just "faggy." faggy?! I'm not sure that's even a word. I can take a hit, but I don't stand for little teenager fuckups that mommys held too long. Shut the fuck up, before I shove that keyboard so far down your throat, that you'll have to be kicked in the ass to type.

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.. look at my sig. i included you.

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Powersofterror > Medication man

lol his comeback to 'you suck' was 'you wish', medicine man, i know that sucking cock for money is normal in your household, but dont bring it to a metal forum k?
Im guessing 13 years old. Any other takes??

And that is a fuckin well written song man

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