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2005-06-23, 12:04
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Home is where the <3 is
Posts: 8,881
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The only thing I can say against it is I'd like to see more verses to it on the same level as the first. I'm not really into this type of lyric, but that sounded really good and I liked the way you did the chorus. You had the "bloody" elements and attitude in it without it sounding childish.
Sorry, but I can't find anything wrong with it. 
Oh, and that block will come and go. I used to worry about it, but I know it's just a passing thing. It's sort of like waves on the ocean that ebb sometimes. When you hit a crest, ride it for all it's worth and when it dies down think of it as a mental vacation of sorts to read other lyrics or do something different. It'll come back.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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