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2005-06-21, 03:46
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"Tragic Release"
"Tragic Release"
Jacob Fitzlaff
Passing storms overhead,
Moments of fright take hold.
With humanity I walk this path,
Counting breaths till I'm old.
Out amongst the maelstrom,
Head first into the storm.
With bravery in hand I walk on,
Holding my breath till morn.
Oh, I've let go.
Oh, I've let go.
Taking it all in with a smile,
I'll take the end with a smile.
Merciful defeat,
My tragic release.
Orange skies above me,
Depression grasps my hand.
With acceptance I walk away,
leaving behind the shadow of a man.
Oh, I've let go.
Oh, I've let go.
Taking it all in with a smile,
I'll take the end with a smile.
Merciful defeat,
My tragic release.
An angel guided me here,
She whispered words of deceit,
With understanding I walk no more,
This is my tragedy, oh sweet relief.
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2005-06-21, 14:53
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So why the heck did you ask me for aid in writing when you write like this? Or were you just hittin' on granny here? 
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-06-21, 16:34
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Well...It took a tornado to get me to write this. That gave me the idea on how to start. I've had the chorus done for weeks. And yeah, grandma's are hawt  
Though I still can't tell whether you like it or not.
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2005-06-21, 17:32
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Good stuff Tulvox!
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2005-06-21, 18:12
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Nice,very interesting,I love it.  |
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2005-06-21, 18:33
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Oh, you can't read between the lines? Hmm. Yeah, I liked it. There's not a thing wrong with it that I can see except you spelled first wrong. Good flow. Good content. l Let's heat it.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-06-21, 19:03
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Originally Posted by L,B'XXX
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Don't talk to me about spelling/grammatical errors... 
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2005-06-21, 19:07
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Originally Posted by Tulvox
Don't talk to me about spelling/grammatical errors... |
I keep saying I need an embarrassed smiley just for me. heehee Hey, I'm a cook! You have to heat it so we can hear it. (Sounds like that makes sense anyways.
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2005-06-21, 19:08
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Get back in the kitchen and make me an e-pie woman!
(edit: added an "n" to the "a")
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2005-06-21, 19:21
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Very good!
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Burnin' and a-lootin' tonight
burnin' all pollution tonight
burnin' all illusion tonight
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2005-06-23, 01:28
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Originally Posted by blizzard_beast
Get back in the kitchen and make me an e-pie woman!
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Make your own e-pie fat boy!!!
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-06-25, 17:08
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2005-06-26, 01:28
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Yeh, the song is pretty good, but why did you classify it metal??
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2005-06-26, 03:00
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For the same reasons Metallica's Unforgiven is metal.
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2005-06-26, 18:09
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For the same reasons Metallica's Unforgiven is metal.
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 Because you suck??????
I'm sorry! I couldn't resist. I love ya, Tullie. heehee
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-06-26, 20:46
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2005-06-27, 23:55
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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