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Old 2005-06-19, 09:51
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New concept

Wrote it yesterday.

COLORBLIND.

Chapter I

"Flies or Angels"

"Something reached for me, carressed me so softly
raised me from below to above, wrote my name in the sand
Erased it, hoped for me to remember - I never did though!
and still I wonder, was it flies - or angels?
I travelled the skies and the waters
The seven seas and the air beneath - on albatross wings
Woke up to the sound of a choir in the wilderness
and still I wonder, was it flies - or angels?"

Blue -
- "Blood"

"Under protective wings, some birds learn to fly
but I was put in cup of coffee and was taught to swim.
The distant taste of cigarettes; The gathering of crows - Overhead
The tasteful words of speaker's speech; "Blood proves you right!"
Kings and Queens and aeroplanes crashing in the sky
As ghosts of yesterdays, recognize my voice
I leave the mosquito in sink, and crawl through the waterpipes
Offer you a ride, but leave you without a choice
we talk about yesteryear, as we sail through BLUE sky
SECURITY under protective wings."

Brown -
- "Vertigo"

"Hiding in shallow grass, so COMFORT
Holding on to the sun; holding on to my baloon.
Your shadow reached my hiding place, it reached for my hand.
Take me to the moon, and I'll show you the sun
Wake me up yesterday, and I'll show you tomorrow
as life breaks through to the surface
from it's cradling beneath the soil.
BROWN eyes in vertigo - Dance!"

"I have always been taught to do the right thing - but what if I don't know what the right thing is?"

Chapter II

Red -
- "Wine"

"Blood poured as wine into glasses - now in RED
And I drank yours and you drank mine
as we sat there, watching the sun rise in an endless horizon
A horizon that I once travelled
To paint this beautiful sight into your eyes
as I swore that I would
Forever LOVE the sound of your beating heart
and you swore that you would forever love mine."


Green -
- "Flowers in my veins"

"You looked so beautiful as you stood there.
The trees in GREEN, shaped to fit perfectly into this scene,
Where HOPE was a flower that stood thousandfold
and you as the prettiest of them all.
But was it snakes running through my veins
or flies behind your eyes..."

Yellow -
- "The Piper"

"...That misled you. The wind carressing you softly
whilst the piper played his songs in the sidewalks
You never even smiled to him
Or noticed that his face, was my face
The tunes played; JEALOUSY laughing;
Snakes crawling through the waterpipes
to meet you at the corner
and offer you a bite of heaven.
Would you accept; Would you believe a beggar's YELLOW lying eyes
if he offered you that bite of heaven...
Still the wind carressing you, and me - watching from afar.
Would you leave the piper alone in the sidewalks?"


Purple -
- "Thorns of the Mosquito"

"I cut the thorns of the roses - Danced upon them
I cut the mosquito in two - and ate the bitter half
Just to feel better than you.
I cut my shadow of my feets - and left it on the wall.
I called upon God - Put the thorns of the roses into his crown
Then I took his place.
I painted the skies PURPLE - and rain fell to the ground below.
I tasted the stars - as you ate the rest of the mosquito
and I felt better than you.
And I forgot all about my shadow.
Never did I realize the ARROGANCE."

"Through the dust on the ground spires a tree, and it's like watching loneliness rise, cause we all know that one tree wont make a forest..."

Chapter III

Grey -
- "Colorblind choirs"

"Memories on blank linens.
I cut the thorns of the piper hid himself in the shallow grass
Offered me a bite of yesteryear
as I painted his eyes forever loving the sound of the wilderness choir
sang of cigarettes and kings and queens crawling through the waterpipes
accepting your dreaming state of mind
You're garden seems to be overgrown by snakes, and flowers left on the wall
I took a picture of it, burned it in the fireplace
And now angels show up in GREY whenever I think of your garden
Colorblind? The choir sings a SADdened tune..."

White -
- "Cleansing wires"

"In this fragile reality
I saw puppets dance on strings
And I watched through bloodstained eyes
Arabesques on the wall in the background;
Ravens on the wire above;
CLEANSING water running through the wire;
ravens speaking of irony;
as I was asked by a child, dressed in WHITE
if that was me, dancing along with the puppets..."

"So your alcoholic dreams
Seems sober tonight
Mother spoke
by your bedside
Reality through empty words
So your alcoholic dreams
seems sober tonight
through the phone
she spoke to you
Reality through empty words
She spoke to you
Through the phone
Snakes running through your veins
Through the phone
Reality through empty words!"

Black -
- "Peter Pan"

"It was Peter Pan who made my twentieth heart
I laughed, but he cried when I exchanged it for a tree with falling leaves
You told me reality was beneath the first fallen leaf of the century
But I disagreed with you, and showed you my hiding place
Where your shadow hang on the wall, still!
You took my hand and whispered into my ear:
"Hiding your reality, won't help you dream at night!"
And we sat there, by the shoreside, drinking wine
From Vertigo life and indian sights
Phonewires, and shadows on the wall
you cut me in two and showed me the moon
BLACKened eyes watched from afar
as night walked hand in hand with DEATH
in the moonlit streets..."
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Old 2005-06-20, 01:39
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Old 2005-06-20, 09:48
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I'd like iif you'd comment the lyrics instead :P
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Old 2005-06-20, 15:57
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I don't do lyrics. Although, I notice Peter Pan in there, akin to Fandango?
 
Old 2005-06-20, 16:14
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You wrote all that yesterday? Wow. There's not many people that I can think of that could come up with something like this in a day. Did you do it all at a single sitting? I'd be willing to say so.
The flow of the whole thing seemed very well integrated, but I don't have a clue as to what the insect references are all about. Would you care to elaborate on the story a bit?
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Old 2005-06-21, 11:42
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Originally Posted by L,B'XXX
You wrote all that yesterday? Wow. There's not many people that I can think of that could come up with something like this in a day. Did you do it all at a single sitting? I'd be willing to say so.
The flow of the whole thing seemed very well integrated, but I don't have a clue as to what the insect references are all about. Would you care to elaborate on the story a bit?


Some of it I really don't know, as I don't think about what I write, while I write it. I believe the snake, comes from the bible - Adam and Eve. Now I don't believe in such stories, but I use it anyways.

The flies - I think I might have thought of their eyes. As far as I know they have lots of them? Must have thought of that being confusing.

Birds have the ability to fly - fly away from "danger". But not if they're put in a cup of coffee

So all in all, this is something about hiding, finding another way around.

Chapter I

"Flies or angels" - Should have been some kind of birth of something. Maybe the "danger" - the need to "hide" or run away.

"Blood" - We're told that birds don't fly in a cup of coffee. That the "main person" is unable to "fly away from it all", but that his blood will prove him right (???) (Reprise in Red - "wine"). "Kings and queens and aeroplanes crashing in the sky" (Confused, something doesn't make sense....). The next four lines, could be some kinda dream - dreaming of leaving tthat cup of coffee.

"Vertigo" - Hiding. Comfort. "Holding on to the sun; holding on to my baloon" - Holding on to all the good things, perhaps.
"Take me to the moon, and I'll show you the sun
Wake me up yesterday, and I'll show you tomorrow" - In for a trade, huh? Get me out of this, and I'll show you the world.
"As life breaks through to the surface" - think of flowers that bloom in the early spring.

"I have always been taught to do the right thing - but what if I don't know what the right thing is?" - Makes sense without much explaining?

Chapter II

"Wine" - Falling in love with...something? And drinking blood as wine. "Blood will prove that we always belong together" - Now I have never been taught to do the right thing

"Flowers in my veins" - More love. You're beautiful - but something doesn't really go well. Flies or snakes?

"The Piper" - I...am the piper! But you don't notice him, as the wind carresses you softly. You accept the snakes offer and heaven falls apart.
Now we heard something of crawling through the waterpipes earlier.
"I leave the mosquito in sink, and crawl through the waterpipes" (remember?) - which I called some kind of a dream, perhaps a prediction (what is it called? Forecast) of what will happen.

"Thorns of the mosquito" - Now as you're being intimate with "the wind", I might as well do something! So I dance (*reprise reprise*"Brown eyes in vertigo - dance!") upon the thorns of the roses. "I cut the thorns of the roses" - that was ME doing that - which means, that maybe it's myself that is the reason for all this. Hiding!? maybe I shouldn't hide! "I" hurt myself in "purple" - but I feel better than you. I feel as a God. I taste the stars - leave you with the rest of the mosquito.

"Through the dust on the ground spires a tree, and it's like watching loneliness rise, cause we all know that one tree wont make a forest..." - Being a God can be pretty lonesome at times.

"Colorblind choirs" - Memories. In grey.
"Memories on blank linens.
I cut the thorns of the piper hid himself in the shallow grass
Offered me a bite of yesteryear
as I painted his eyes forever loving the sound of the wilderness choir
sang of cigarettes and kings and queens crawling through the waterpipes
accepting your dreaming state of mind" - I really had fun writing that :P Dreaming state of mind - this is not reality! HIDING!
and whenever "I" think of "you" - "you" show up in grey. Memories. In grey.

"Cleansing wires" - It is time to leave all the anger and pain behind, as the end draws near. Because it really is me, dancing along with the puppets on the strings, and there's nothing I can do about it, is there!? NOTHING I CAN DO!?

"So your alcoholic dreams
seems sober tonight...etc" - So finally your dreams become your reality. They speak to you, through the phone, as you're lying in a hospital bed, and there's nothing that they can do...nothing that you can do, nothing that I can do.

"Peter Pan" - We're in some kind of dreaming state of mind as well, here at the end - Death!
Peter Pan has the ability to fly. So he helped me back on my feets on the other side, but I couldn't handle that, I'd rather have a heart of falling leaves. I met...you (??? So we finally meet again, huh?), telling me, reality was hidden beneath the first fallen leaf of the century, but clearly that couldn't be right! So I showed you my hiding place. Your shadow on the wall...a memory of a time long passed. And we sat there drinking wine (*reprise reprise*)...from Vertigo life, indian sights etc etc. (Memories.)...But perhaps, it wasn't real at all...sitting there next to you. Just a fading memor...DEATH!

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Now I hope that made some sense to what this is all about. It did for me, as I didn't know this before either :P I sometimes need to look back at what I've written to really understand it.

/King of Loss.
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Old 2005-06-21, 11:44
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Originally Posted by L,B'XXX
You wrote all that yesterday? Wow. There's not many people that I can think of that could come up with something like this in a day. Did you do it all at a single sitting? I'd be willing to say so.
The flow of the whole thing seemed very well integrated, but I don't have a clue as to what the insect references are all about. Would you care to elaborate on the story a bit?


And well, not exactly all of it, but all except "wine" and "Cleansing wires".
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Old 2005-06-21, 19:58
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It was good piece of writing.

What I don't get is why you capitalized some words.
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Old 2005-06-21, 22:46
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The words Capitalized.

Blue - security
Brown - comfort
Red - love
Green - hope
Yellow - Jealousy
Purple - Arrogance
Grey - Sad(ness)
White - Cleansing
Black - Death

Makes some sorta sense...at least it should...
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Old 2005-06-22, 18:24
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It was pretty cool. You put some thought into using the visual aspect of it as well as the performing aspect. It's still pretty off the wall to me, but I don't have that complex a brain. It does have some cool imagery and would probably make for a good epic piece.
Thanks for your indepth explanations. That helped me a lot.
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