2005-05-28, 12:30
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Home is where the <3 is
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I thought the first part was really good, but it sort of disappointed me from the last line in the next to last verse to the end here and there. Maybe because I was getting a more cosmic vibe from what you wrote in the rest. It settled into a cut and dried place instead of leaving wonderment.
It's not bad at all though. There's a lot of pretty cool thoughts in it.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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