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2005-04-05, 21:11
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" Venom "
A little stronger than I normally write. It was fun to write. Thanks for reading.
" Venom "
(vs 1)
Spider fingers filtering through the smokey haze
The smile that opened and devoured my heart
Bite sunk into bone, losing tension
Paralyzed from top to toe
(vs 2)
You're hypnotizing me to do what you want
Tightly gripping what used to be my mind
You gathered up all my senses
And whisked them out the door
(chorus)
You think you've melted all my defenses away
Left me to beg, give me more
Addicted to a venom I can't live without
But there's something I haven't shown you yet
(break)
So what do you think you're going to do now
Do you think you can keep me this way forever
Do you think you're that clever
Baby, I've got a scorpion's sting
You haven't seen anything yet
Once you've had a taste of what I have to offer
The table of fortune will be turned
And you'll want the best of me
To bring out the beast in you,
Over and over again,
And I know just what I'll do
When my venom is inside you
(vs 3)
But for now you can think me cast under your spell
I won't try to find a way to break it
In time you'll discover we shared the same weakness
Struck with the same bite.
(chorus)
You think you've melted all my defenses away
Left me to beg, give me more
Addicted to a venom I can't live without
But there's something I haven't shown you yet
Once you've had a taste of what I have to offer
The table of fortune will be turned
And you'll want the best of me
To bring out the beast in you,
Over and over again,
And I know just what I'll do
When my venom is inside you
BJH
4/4/2005
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-04-09, 06:04
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Very good stuff.
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2005-04-09, 10:52
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:')
HEART HEART. That is awesome. It really reminds me of what I want to write, but it's a lot stronger.
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2005-04-09, 12:26
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Aww, thanks. I thought this was gonna be another one that passed on by with goose egg' for replies. Glad you liked it. 
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-04-11, 02:05
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I can picture this as being either a dark atmospheric song or a 80's hair metal song.
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2005-04-11, 12:18
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Like your avatar. He's great.
Let's go with the dark atmospheric. The thought of Poison or someone like that doing this just grosses me out.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2005-04-11, 21:00
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hehe 
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2005-04-12, 05:52
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sorry, but i did get the hair metal vibe!!
In fact, half way through it i played it in my head with some hair metal vocals singing what i was reading.
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