This wine was lead, a heavy sleeping poison
Blinded by light,polluted by your sermons,
Lay on the floor, the last of my life bleeding
Out into you.
I hope it burns your veins.

Chorus
You told me we were never meant to be alone
You told me we were never meant to be afraid
But then again, oust what you said,
I'm stepping out into the dark.

These words, you were in rapture
when you excreted them out of your soul
a blackened sliver of rejection,
Played out like a bad hand of cards
in front of me.
What you won will consume you.

Chorus

The candle wax that covered my eyes
A blanket of confusion, this comfortable lie,
I was so drunk on fear, so drunk on you,
You took me for all I was worth.
Nothing to you.
This emptiness will take you in.

Chorus

Out in the dark and in the cold,
the rain has cleansed me of your mark,
The snow my bedstead,
Twas you that lead you to decay.

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I was getting one idea from it and then you twisted that right around. Not bad. I dont' thinkit's one of my favorites of yours. I think it could be tightened up a bit in phrasing but maybe it's just the way I read it this time. I do like the idea and the title drew me in.

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Tell me where abouts I twisted the idea please... It's not my tightest work, I came up with the chorus and verses separately and the ending is weak so I'll strenghten somehow, I'm pretty down right now so it might help (herzeleid, HERZELEID).

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I think I was thinking at the beginning and chorus it was more your own fall, but then it turned around to be the other in the song. The destruction they had caused you actually became their downfall. Does that make sense?

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Yeah, that's the gist of it. The basic story is that someone kept a night creature in the light, consuming their strenght and using them for their own means, telling them their natural environment would destroy them and the creature finally realises that it should be in the dark, and nearly defeated it makes it's way to safety, leaving it's equally weakened captor to die, but the ending ruins it, and I'm rewritting the chorus right now, the ending is forced in my opinion.

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