I gaze through your nocturnal eternity
Derived from sorrow once felt
Like autumn moonlight you shine so pale among the fallen
Exposing that within
And relinquishing that without

That which is relative to reality has diminished
The Dream and Cosmic now one
Oaths once made now broken
Life and Death United by pain

Each breath a regret
Each hope a masochisitc endulgance
Each lie a truth
Each truth a lie

The flesh now dead
The soul unrest
And with an ill grin your brush fell upon the canvas

With each murder
With each portrait
Your mind reveals that which is "unknown"
That which only you create

It's not bad. It seems a bit abstract since something that actually eludes to me that an artist is involved doesn't come about til the last couple verses. Iread it about 4 times and then I tried something. If you used the last 2 verses at the beginning I don't think your story will change and the artist will be more visible in the rest of the piece. It's like Red Riding Hood giving grandma the cookies without any introduction of a wolf character before that. It seems its just there. Your wording and flow was good though. It was interesting.

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