The creator of evil, in power once more
His obsession was that of gore
For no ordinary emperor was this in command
Random slaughter to satisfy his demand

THE BONE YARD

Brutally beaten, his daily desire
Made his enjoyment continue higher
Seeking to add to his growing bone yard
The rivers ran red with victim's blood

THE BONE YARD

The people gathered, discussing a revolt
Desiring this massacre to come to a holt
Their plan was to attack during his sleep
His unpleasant dreams of death, so deep

Weapons in hand, they headed for his great hall
A matter of seconds, of life-or-death, no time to stall
Under the cover of darkness, they set off to find their goal
To kill this barbarian with a heart of coal

And so they made their way to his fort
The families of the victims, so distraught
Adrenaline pumping through their veins
Revenge the only thing driving their brains

A sudden attack and the emperor was dead
The people celebrated while the emperor bled
His life concludes with a death equally as brutal and hard
Now he's a victim of his own bone yard

HIS.......OWN.......BONE.......YARD.....



i'm posting this because i probably will not use it in a song. i could imagine this song going up against a not-as-cheesy-as-is-normally power metal tune. this was inspired by a lesson in 7th-grade history about a chinese emperor.

I think you mean 'halt' not 'holt' , but other than than that I think it was pretty cool.You could get into a little of the psychology of why he did what he did as a break in it or something to give it a little diversity, but the story line itself was well done. I'm assuming this was about an actual event. Neil Young did some marvelous work with historical events such as in "Cortez the Killer" and Nugent did some, too. You might get a different musical idea that way and maybe since it's oriental some traditional instruments could be used in it for variation.

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firstly, yes i did mean "halt," thats a fault on my part.
secondly, it was semi-based on real life. it was a real emperor, real barbarian emperor, but i'm quite sure his people never rebelled against him.
and i like your idea of using chinese instruments as well, oriential-influenced power metal

It was your 'folt' whehehe :P jk

clever though