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2005-02-17, 23:38
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some lyrics I wrote.
-Reascenscion Of Ions
Charged particles descending onto the reviled stage of invidious seclusion
Chaos bounds as reincreamated souls become one in dissillusion
Essence gives way to a mutant strain of advanced decay
Rotting away in the soil of the nether-earth
Scraping away the earthen waste to reveal the inner decay
Ions, reascending, moving as one
Fortitude gives way to the upward movement, leaving souls to writhe in chaos
Essence fades from existence into a state of repulsion and disgust
Stretching across the infinite bowels of endlessness
The portal is closing
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2005-02-18, 03:34
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not too bad at all. a bit short, but good.  |
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2005-02-18, 15:21
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Ya used one of my least faviroite words twice in it. I don't know why 'decay' gets on my nerves, but it does. The first one I suppose is okay. It's not real blantant, but the second one could be replaced with decompostion and it would keep out repetition. At first I thought it was a bit too thesaurus sounding, but with the exception of the word--reincreamated--it was pretty up front and easy to understand. I kinda liked it for something refreshing.
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2005-02-19, 06:46
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All words from my vocabulary, reincremation is a suffocation song, so theres a slight nod to them in there. Thanks for the words Andrew and metal mom.
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2005-02-19, 07:11
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And the 'Of Ions' is a nod to Wormed?
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2005-02-19, 07:19
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In a way, yes. I have always had an abiding interest in physics and astronomy, and although Origin inspires me to write spacey lyrics more than Wormed, Wormeds concept is nothing short of genius.
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