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2004-12-13, 03:09
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Lo, they do call to me...
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lost in desolation
wrote this 12/8/04, it goes along with the last poem i posted on here, "shores of mourning", i am gonna write atleast one more poem that goes with them, all based around a lake called "mourning"
lost in desolation
by caleb roberts
lying at the bank of a fog covered lake
contemplating my life's duration
lost in the mist of the waters of Mourning
lost in desolation
amidst the ivy on the ne'er trodden earth
hidden from view of the world
ethereal shadows of the moonlit forest
alight the lake, colored pearl
deep in the woods, and deep in thought
i take in a moment of life
a single moment that lightens my death
of a existence stricken with strife
clouds pass by the harvest moon
darkening the view of the lake
no light to behold, no life to live
nor another breath to take
dawn draws nearer, my heart cries out
"before the sun paints the sky,
end it now, while you still now how,
while you still know what it means to die."
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2004-12-13, 15:46
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Really good work! This lyrics is very good. I'd like to see more of your lyrics....
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2004-12-13, 22:38
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That was great. The only thing I saw was --of (an) existence stricken with strife--instead of 'a' there. Beautifully done imagery. I felt like I was a moth on a tree sharing the moment.
Cool.
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2004-12-14, 13:27
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Lo, they do call to me...
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Originally Posted by L,B'XXX
That was great. The only thing I saw was --of (an) existence stricken with strife--instead of 'a' there. Beautifully done imagery. I felt like I was a moth on a tree sharing the moment.
Cool.
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yeah, thinking faster than i could type, thank you both for the comments, as soon as i write more, ill post it up here
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