Cool, although it doesn't seem to flow as well as it it could, it's typical BM with a lot of good imagery, a few typos too.

"venom vile death drives"

WTF?

"death creeps in while

socerer's spells witches cry"

Why'd you separate that? Baf typo too, dangerous in the fact that it's not spelt phonetically but it would be badly pronounced if read like this. Overall, very cool with amazing potential, keep up the good work

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