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2004-11-24, 12:55
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a few words of mine...
go easy on me, im not a writer. the most meaningful thing ive done apart from this was about the grim reaper playing shred guitar at the top of a mountain in a thunderstorm "with the gleam of a diamond in his eye".
anyway...
deep In the blackest night
epiphony in vision
a dream in purest white
of imagination
a standing sillhuette
where clouds roll back unfold
not that which i expect
imagination put on hold
proclaim your innocence?
could you be so bold as to
defile the evidence
false pretences don't suit you
indeed you're accepted
into my warped incoherent mind
never rejected
perpetual life is not unkind
maybe you want the ending
maybe your thirst is cold
beyond my understanding
your actions must have goals
who can comprehend my addiction
unworthy deamon you offer affliction
who can not say that im slain and im wasting away
glorified insolence
my mind has missed it all
where is the relevance
its my own twisted fault
my status elevated
exchanging like for like
my mind assimilated
living without a life
live by your relevations
your word your bond your sign
immortal, lacking patience
and so begins decline
we are built selfdestucting
logic defies the light
my dream was so decieving
now ive given up the fight
who can comprehend my addiction
unworthy deamon of affliction
who can not say that im slain and im wasting away
my mind eliminated
my mind's eye separated
my mind incorparated
my mind assimilated
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"The complexity of the penguins' lifestyle testifies to a Divine Creator," said one commentator on Christian Answers. "To think that natural selection or even the penguins themselves could come up with the idea to migrate miles and miles multiple times each year without their partner or their offspring is a bit insulting to my intellect. How great is our God!"
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2004-11-24, 14:18
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Cool.
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2004-11-24, 14:33
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Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: In my mind most of the time
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Keep at it!! For someone that isn't a writer you sure look like you are.
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Annoying humanity sickens me..........I contemplate your extinction
Nothing is too sick R.I.P Euronymous
WILL THE WORLD JUST SHUT UP ABOUT VARG VIKERNES!!
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2004-11-24, 16:30
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Location: Brazil
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Fuck Man, you have talent bro!
so, you'll help me doing some lyrics!!hehehe 
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2004-11-24, 21:11
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cheers
all i need now is to be able to sing it.
P.S. posative and negative comments are welcomed
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"The complexity of the penguins' lifestyle testifies to a Divine Creator," said one commentator on Christian Answers. "To think that natural selection or even the penguins themselves could come up with the idea to migrate miles and miles multiple times each year without their partner or their offspring is a bit insulting to my intellect. How great is our God!"
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2004-11-25, 00:42
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Location: canada eh
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I like it alot man.
(i like you're sig too   )
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Imagine there's no countries,
It isnt hard to do,
Nothing to kill or die for,
No religion too,
Imagine all the people
living life in peace...
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2004-11-25, 16:49
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I am a tax on the world..
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Hey that isn't bad, the rhyming is nice, same with the flow/syllable structure. But you gatta come up with a title.....
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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2004-11-25, 22:25
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Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: canada eh.
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how about.
power soft error!
that's great!
(i know, i'm a dumbass)
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"When I die, I cast a shadow
And I'll rise, I cast a shadow"
R.I.P
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2004-11-26, 00:39
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
Location: Home is where the <3 is
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nobody's gonna argue there.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2004-11-26, 03:40
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I am a tax on the world..
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Location: pizza with a shit on it!
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Psh...  ....that won't make any sense.....
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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