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can i get some opinoins on something i wrote
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Decayed Kiss
by Caleb Roberts
tuning Bb-Eb-Ab-Db-F-Bb
riff 1a
all 8th note triplets
|---------------------------------------------------------------|
|---------------------------------------------------------------|
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|-------13-------------13-------------13-------12-------11------|
|-0-0-0----12-11-0-0-0----12-11-0-0-0----12-11----11-10----10-9-|
. . . . . . . . .
riff 1b
still with triplet feel
|---------------------------------------------------------------|
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|-------13-------------13-------------13-------12-------11------|
|-0-000----12-11-0-000----12-11-0-000----12-11----11-10----10-9-|
riff 2
triplets
|1,3,5,7|2,6 |4 |8
|-------------------------|-------|-------|-------|---------|
|-------------------------|-------|-------|-------|---------|
|o------------------------|------o|------o|------o|---------|
|o------------------------|--ph--o|--ph--o|------o|---------|
|-11------11------11------|--10~--|--12~--|--5/8--|--5/8\2--|
|----10-9----10-9----10-9-|-------|-------|--3/6--|--3/6\0--|
.. . .. . .. .
riff 3
all 16th notes except unmuted chords, which are quarter notes
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|-2222222222222222555555553333333322222222222222225---55558---8888-|
|-0000000000000000333333331111111100000000000000003---33336---6666-|
................................................ .... ....
riff 4
all 16th notes
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|------------------------------------------------------------------|
|-2222222222222222555555553333333322222222222222225555555588888888-|
|-0000000000000000333333331111111100000000000000003333333366666666-|
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riff 5
all but last 8 notes have triplet feel, last 8 are 16th notes.
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|------7-----------7-----------7------6-----5-----4---|
|-0-00---6-5~-0-00---6-5~-0-00---6-5~---5-4---4-3---3-|
.. .. .. . . . . .
riff 6
all muted notes are 16th notes, slid chords are 8th notes,
ending power chords are quarter
|-------------------------------------------------------------------|
|-------------------------------------------------------------------|
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|---------------------------4\3--------------------------------5--5-|
|-5\4--------------5\4------2\1------5\4--------------5\4------3--3-|
|-3\2-222222222222-3\2-2222-----0000-3\2-222222222222-3\2-2222-3--3-|
............ .... .... ............ ....
riff 7
8th note triplets
|----------------------|
|----------------------|
|----------------------|
|----------------------|
|-7-----6-----5-----4\-|
|---6-5---5-4---4-3-2\-|
song order
riff 1a 2x\
riff 1b 2x }bpm=132
riff 2 1x/
riff 3 2x\
riff 4 4x/bpm=184
riff 5 4x bpm=132
riff 6 8x\
riff 7 1x/bpm=184
end
i am just looking for some opinions on how you guys think it flows, its kinda typical death metal, i am trying tork work a second guitar part during the straight powerchord riffs, but thatll come later
thanks.
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Cant really tell how good it is. I cant look at a tab and know how its supposed to sound. Try recording it.
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2004-11-13, 01:18
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Make a PT of it for us all! thats what I do to make my songs "official"... sorta.
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2004-11-14, 03:50
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heres the powertab version
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hmm pretty good, ive heard intros like that before, my freind wrote somthing on power tabs the other month and it looks pretty the exact same.
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2004-11-14, 04:08
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That intro sounds just like a lamb of god song, dont know which tho.
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Hey thanks for the PT!
It sounds good, but i think i missed something, i mean whats with that big break? The rest is good though.
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Not bad
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That intro sounds just like a lamb of god song, dont know which tho.
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Hey thanks for the PT!
It sounds good, but i think i missed something, i mean whats with that big break? The rest is good though.
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the bass is gonna play the line that the guitar plays after, i just didnt feel like tabbing a bass line. got the idea from CC - Hammer Smashed Face
btw, the intro kinda sounds like LoG's "11th hour"
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That intro does remind me of 11th Hour..............
Awesome song though! If you ever record a full version, you should post it.
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heres an updated version with the tempos fixed, a bass line added, and a second guitar added.
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Pretty good...but it needs a solo!
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I dont like that second bit, after the break. The rest rules.
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2004-11-16, 15:15
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which, the guitar line, or the bass break deal.
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Yeah, I also liked the first half better.
Btw Moon, did you mainly use theory/scales to write your song, or did you 'do what sounds good'?
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Yeah, I also liked the first half better.
Btw Moon, did you mainly use theory/scales to write your song, or did you 'do what sounds good'?
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what sounds good, why?
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I'm intrested what techniques other people use to write their songs.
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I'm intrested what techniques other people use to write their songs. |
i usually just dick around with random riffs, until i find some that go together, then i link them with something, and i keep adding until i have a song. i am finishing a tab on a song i wrote this way, and i will post it when im done, usually these songs get pretty long, the one im gonna post is between 9-10 minutes long.
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i have a riff, and i play it until i add more to have a song, thats how i wrote the one i have posted in this thread, i had the intro riff, and i just kept playing until i felt it was finished.
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Fuckin badass bro!
Love the triplet feel. Does sound like LOG
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