It is about time that you understood
that where you're going to, you're going to for good,
Beside the box that's labeled broken glass,
they have a box that's just for broken hearts.

Chorus
You fell and didn't get back up
You slept and you didn't wake up
You slipped away right out ' my arms (I took away the "of" to keep the metre. Instead of the '"of" there is a breath mark)
My life is made of broken glass.


These are the stairs and you just tumbled down,
you lost your robe, your spectre and your crown,
beneath my feet, beneath the ground, beneath the filth,
I found you, and you just fed me guilt.

Chorus X 2

Some sort of outro.


TADA! This is what I do when I get bored in math class. Comments please, I'm new to writting...

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Not too bad. I wouldn't worry about the 'of' in that one part. There's a good change it would be pronounced as "outta' anyways. The only other thing was 'spectre' . Do you mean sceptre?
It has a nice meter to it and a good storyline. I do think that it should have more to it to bring it to a completion. It seems to drop off at the end. It needs something to balance out so get busy with that outro.
I wrote most of the time when I was in school and believe me, my grades showed it. I got A's and B's in Ages of Poetry and choir, but it was pretty diverse in everything else.

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