here are a set of lyrics i wrote for a black/death metal project me and my friend are starting,l what do you guys think?

Altar of Armageddon
Generic slaves to the system await
Grandeous monuments arisen to a fake god
DESTROYED!!

Ghouls disturbing the night
Realisation of world misanthropy
Black mountains arise
Reaction to Christianity
BURIED ALIVE!!

Mindless hordes of wasps amassing
Feeding on flock mentality
Assimilation into regularity
NATURE OF MAN DEFILED!!

Hoi,

Good work... I like it, though it could be longer (depends on the background music) and have deeper meaning. I always find lyrics attractive in which you cannot see the meaning of it in first place.

But I think you are certainly on the right track....

P.s. I'm at the moment, so excuse my grametically non- sense

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cheers man, well it's meant to be a short song, i'll write some more lyrics later, i'm also so don't worry, here are some lyrics that my friend wrote:

Left to rot!
on the cross
mutilated and tortured!
a fake prophet of god!

faceless and nameless
die a martyr
suffer in torment
for the sake of
NOTHING!

your god is a fake
your heaven is lie
only the vultures will care
when you die!
your pain doesnt't
matter
neither does gore
you are here
to suffer the silence
SILENCE!

Left to rot!
on the cross
mutilated and tortured!
a fake prophet of god!

suffer
THE SILENCE!

I read the first and second parts so I'll give you my take on it. If I could understand the words I'd be slightly put off (as in I wouldn't give you money or promote the song ) because of you blatantly bashing a sect of religion. However if you became non-specific I might be more willing to make a purchase or tell someone that it's a really cool song. I'm old so I'm picky. Bear with me and I'll try not to step on toes.

So what I did was take your pieces and blend the 2 together. Parts sounded a bit juvenile and put there just for shock value which doesn't do a thing for me personally. However there is some good imagery in it. The wasps especially were spine-tingling ! whoo! But anyways I got a big dark metal feel from it and I would be interested in hearing what you do withi it. Here's my version with my notes included. Let me know your thoughts.

Altar of Armageddon
Generic slaves to the system await
Grandeous monuments arisen to a fake god
DESTROYED!!

Ghouls disturbing the night --(Ditch ghouls, sounds too "Thriller" to be serious, maybe use apparitions ?)
Realisation of world misanthropy
Black mountains arise
Reaction to Christianity (Reaction to godliness, opt ?.)
BURIED ALIVE!!

(break)
your god is a fake
your heaven is lie
only the vultures will care
when you die!
your pain doesnt't
matter
neither does gore
you are here
to suffer the silence
SILENCE!

Mindless hordes of wasps amassing
Feeding on flock mentality
Assimilation into regularity
NATURE OF MAN DEFILED!!

faceless and nameless
die a martyr
suffer in torment
for the sake of
NOTHING!

suffer
THE SILENCE!
suffer
THE SILENCE!
suffer
THE SILENCE!

BTW--I like "Suffer, the Silence" as a title.

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yeah the way you combined the two sets of lyrics is cool, like before the first break have the guitars all slow and heavy, and then have it speed up some sick riff in the background. (The "suffer the silence" lyrics are written by a good friend of mine) I'll reply to your comments:

+ Ghouls - yes i agree, sounds a bit cheesy - apparations is a bit too long a word, perhaps something like spirits/spectres/wraiths ?

+Christianity - i disagree with all religion, so maybe a more generalized word like piety (Reaction to a piety)

yep combining the two lyrics sounds really good, it breaks up the song more, otherwise it would be quite boring.

thanks mate!

Anytime. And I like spectres about the best for that line. Sounds good to me. Glad you liked my combinations. I think it kicks some butt.

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