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2004-10-15, 23:06
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Bloodbath
The vocalist of my group wrote these. We call it 'Bloodbath'.
My sentence has been cut short
They say I've made amends
They tell me that I must go free
Free to kill again
So I must destroy all life
And don't discriminate
Only death can save you from
This hell I will create
Bloodbath, no one will leave this place alive
Fallen, so far from grace I deserve to die
Oh fuck no, apprehended
Chastised for all those dead
The only thing left to comfort me
Are the voices in my head
The victims will want justice
All my debts are due
Once the killer was inside of me
But now it's inside you
Bloodbath, no one will leave this place alive
Fallen, so far from grace I deserve to die
What's going on inside of my head
I will not stop until I am dead
Bloodbath
Bloodbath
Personally, I think he could have done a little better, but I still think they're a good set of lyrics. What do you guys think?
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2004-10-16, 00:34
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I liked these lines best. The beginning yes I didn't quite grasp it.
Bloodbath, no one will leave this place alive
Fallen, so far from grace I deserve to die
Oh fuck no, apprehended
Chastised for all those dead
The only thing left to comfort me
Are the voices in my head
The victims will want justice
All my debts are due
Once the killer was inside of me
But now it's inside you
Bloodbath, no one will leave this place alive
Fallen, so far from grace I deserve to die
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2004-10-16, 02:19
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Life is pain.
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I liked it alot. The first thing I've liked in here in a while.
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2004-10-17, 00:03
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'So I must destroy all life
And don't discriminate"
I don't like the word "And" there. Shouldn't it be 'Not" instead? Or am I readin git wrong. The rest was very good. I enjoyed it. Good flow and storyline. It seemed like it would be good to sing with , too. That's sometimes hard to find in this type of song.
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2004-10-17, 03:12
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Life is pain.
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You read it wrong. That means OTHER PEOPLE not to descriminate he's actions. Hes telling them not to descriminate against what he chooses, killing.
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2004-10-21, 18:11
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But why is the rum gone ?
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killer shit dude
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2004-10-21, 23:54
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There's something of a logical contradiction in there that bothers me. When first released, the speaker seems to take this as a mandate to go out and murder everyone; this tells us two things:
1. He's insane.
2. He's unaware of his insanity.
Then, in the first verse after the chorus, we have another little reminder that he's insane - 'The only thing left to comfort me/Are the voices in my head' - which goes against the above point two. If he's so wrapped up in his own deluded vision of the world that he doesn't realize he was set free by some technicality rather than by some divine or diabolical hand that wants him to go on a killing spree, I'd expect him to experience the voices in his head as something different. Something less obvious, even to someone who is insane, as a mark of insanity. Of course, it's somewhat difficult to convey a subtle point like this, but it did bother me.
And, as was said above, changing 'don't' to 'not' would be good. If it's supposed to be him speaking to an audience rather than a continuation of the mandate he's inferred from his early release, that isn't clear. It should be clarified one way or the other.
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2004-10-22, 03:44
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good shit.
the only thing i don't like is the
"oh fuck no" part
but who am i? good shit
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