I get all 'oogie' when I write something like this. I hope you enjoy it. I've been in such a slump writing lately. I like when I get something like this. And it does make a statement whether that will be noticed or not. Thanks for reading. Comment is you like. If you don't and throw vegetables make sure they're diced for a salad. (*mom look* ...and that doesn't mean any salad tossing should go on..........) Thanks !

" Reclaimation Song "

Where once the shallows of River Styx bled red
The simplifications of mentality pulse into the stream
Tainting the sweet vulgarity that used to run so pure.
A choral effect of molten angels cringe in response
To the bastardization of their homeland
And their song has become submerged below the triviality.

Rise up, those who have the keys to sectors of darkness.
Take hold and overpower to claim your right.
Scream in powerful defiance
And bring back to your home the essense of the night.

The way to overcome corruption is to take away it's stronghold
And grant strength to what is oldest and pure
Rejuvinate like a phoenix rising raging in the heat
Scattering the pointless with every beat of it's wings.
Each fluid measure drips steadily, patiently
Til it's overcome and abomination claims ownership.

Rise up, those who have the keys to sectors of darkness.
Take hold and overpower to claim your right.
Scream in powerful defiance
And bring back to your home the essense of the night.

BJH

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hahaha, I like the chorus. Sounds a little powerMetalish, it would be funny to see Dio sing this.

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okay, i'll try to give this a critique

bastardization???

This wasn't really to my taste but seeing that you've already mentioned that you were going for a metal song so good job. It actually made me cringe so i suppose thats what you were going for.

powers'--- Dio ???? Damn it, now I'm gonna have "Holy Diver" earwormed in my head....... I was thinking a little heavier (at least a little deeper voice !) than that, but it's more of a rant actually

larry--awright , I've got a sneaking suspicion about you. You don't happen to be on the Simpson's do ya , hmm???? Shutdown at tc drove ya to it, huh?
I have a brain cell named larry and I KNOW I know you!!!!! And since you weren't crazy about this I think I know who you be.


BTW--Would you like a squishie with that?

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hmm...you're obviously not the type who lets a newbie make a quite entrance.

How did you ever guess?

anyway, about the piece, i suppose i'm asking for trouble logging on to a metal forum and saying i don't like the genre as a whole

Haha, Holy Diver....

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(shakes head at both of ya's )

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