hey this is my first post on this forum. let me know what you think of this song.


History Marches On, but Progress Died

Martyrs lie bloody
Blind courage, changing nothing
Wasted lives
For forgotten ideals

History marches on
But progress died

Populations governed
By corruption and greed
Tyranny rules
Freedom is dead

History marches on
But progress died

Soldiers lie bloody
Fighting for their countries
Ignorant patriotism, as they kill
Believing lies, without question
War, a never ending cycle!

oh yeah i know it doesn't rhyme. i suck at rhyming

Its good to see that message "history marches on,but progress died"..
Its true, and lately, lyrics on this site(in my veiw, but thats because i dont read them much) are lacking, truth.. And such "radical" veiws(to the closed minded) I like it...fuck ryhming.. haha.

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Yeah, you don't have to rhyme something. Do what ya feel and how it flows itself. If it takes on a rhyme scheme, fine, but if it doesn't that's okay , too.

I didn't think it was bad. The last lines I don't quite think are always true, but in some cases I suppose they are. That's personal preference though.
You have a good flow of words and ideas. I can't help but think that if you included a break in there it would give it more body and tell a mini story within . Maybe something about why it is the way it is. Elaborate on the martyrdon or on the politics. or use the "Soldiers lie.." verse for that and add a little to the end. It just feels unfinished to me, but what you have is good. A nice solid, strong drumbeat with bass and guitar coming in would sound cool as heck.

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