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2004-07-23, 10:14
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Senior Metalhead
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Join Date: May 2003
Location: Arizona
Posts: 160
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Metal And Flesh
I feel the cold sharpened metal,
Gently running across my chest.
Laying beds of dead flower petals,
Where condemned souls come to rest.
Night on end the pressure is growing,
soon the skin will break and seperate.
Reflections shine in my eyes showing,
memories of decayed past cant wait.
The metal stake resting on my heart,
molded just for your hands to press.
Its calling your name to do your part,
dont worry it will be but a minor mess.
Cast the stone to the metal and cringe,
Oh and might i add im a screamer.
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!
drive it deeper is that all you got,
cant handle it anymore, let me help you.
outro some dieing breaths maybe?
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2004-07-23, 10:28
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New Blood
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Join Date: Jul 2004
Location: Hail Hitler!
Posts: 39
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Night on end the pressure is growing,
soon the skin will break and seperate.
Reflections shine in my eyes showing,
memories of decayed past cant wait.
Reflections shine in my eyes glowing,
Sorry, couldnt help myself, it starts off pretty good, i dunno about the last two verses though.
EDIT: also check the syllaball count (dammit, how do you spell sylliball or whatever?)
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2004-07-23, 19:50
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I am a tax on the world..
Forum Leader
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Join Date: Mar 2002
Location: pizza with a shit on it!
Posts: 7,994
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syllable  , and this was good until the last verse.
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