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2004-07-20, 09:22
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Vampirical Lyrical
Wake up in, the dead of night,
Soaring through the sky,
No more sun, no more light,
You know you cannot hide,
Hate to live, live to hate,
Waiting for relief,
Searching for, fresh warm blood,
Death is my belief
As i see, my virgin kill,
Tenseness in her steps,
I know i must, drink my fill,
She knows that she is next,
A speeding swoop, death from above,
Grab her by her hair,
Caress her neck, with tender love,
Take her to my lair,
I pierce her neck, bloody teeth,
Blood drips down my chin,
As she dies, i feel no grief,
Let the feast begin.
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2004-07-20, 10:20
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cool I love vampire poems, I'm not good at writing them... I tried once... It ended up sad, sorrowfull, not the way I wanted.
I've always admired vampiric poetry, and this one is most excellent (mr burns style excellent).
You rule. 
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2004-07-20, 12:24
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Wow, today there are such good things to read. Cool as shit. I should post something of mine to break up the monotony and give someone something to bitch about.
No changes to this. It had just the right flow of thought and word. And the meter was EXCELLENT. Cool .
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2004-07-21, 00:45
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Hahah mad, i'll write more, the syllable count comes naturally
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2004-07-21, 10:47
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Hahah nice, there is talent here, u and Brutally_Hacked. Keep writing
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2004-07-21, 11:44
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... not so great.
I also find vampires ridiculous.
5/10 here...
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2004-07-21, 11:49
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Hahah, u didnt like my other one either
Well how's this?
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Yes, i admit it, i find Horses sexually attractive, i also have the shittest taste in lyrics ever. I love vampires. I am a huge Linkin Park fan, i have all their albums.
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2004-07-21, 12:01
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2004-07-21, 12:04
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That was uncalled for.
So I didn't like these lyrics. Don't post them if you're scared of negative criticism.
And whats with the insults anyway? Like anything anyone ever says means something anyway. Because it dosn't. You just keep posting and I'll find something of yours I like.
Maybe.
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2004-07-21, 13:35
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heh heh That remark about the horses was especially amusing to me since at my forum yesterday I was kidding around with one of the guys about him and Seabiscuit gittin' it on. Must be something in the air !!! 
And as my dad used to say "Fight nice!" 
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2004-07-22, 04:01
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Hahah, yeah, im sorry Infinity, that was a bit uncalled for.
Funny though im not scared of bad critisism, it urges me to do better... urges... is that the right word? 
Oh well, yeh, im sorry, and now im confused
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2004-07-23, 09:53
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that's pretty damn cool. I wish I was better at rhyming but I'm not very good at it. Oh well great flow.
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2004-07-23, 10:03
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cheers
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2004-07-26, 12:15
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Belated, however -
No hard feelings here.
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2004-08-10, 13:15
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awesome stuff dude
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