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2004-07-18, 01:58
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A Time of Replete Abolishment
The isolated souls marching on the Devil's path
Enduring their despair, they are forsaken
With all their faith abandoned in a world of sacrilege
Waiting for destruction to awaken
Abortion of the Lord from this dejected, sinful world
Strengthened the intention of the Priests
The holiest of holy have remained throughout the war
Though noone's left to preach to of the beasts
Their twisted sense of dignity is coughing up blood
The unholy maggots have arrived
A premature time of replete abolishment
Leaves all the holy scavengers to writhe
The tyrants overthrown and the dictators deceased
An unrestrained existance is perfected
The battle feilds are bloodied and there's no sign of repent
The mighty too corrupt to be respected
Wrists which hands have abdicated bleed relentlessly
The injured lead the maggots to the soul
Indecisive cretins caused rebellions to fall
Justice unfulfilled, a life unwhole
Their twisted sense of dignity is coughing up blood
The unholy maggots have arrived
A premature time of replete abolishment
Leaves all the holy scavengers to writhe
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2004-07-18, 02:00
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I usually write horror poems/short stories, this one's different to what I usually write so I'm scrounging for opinions 
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2004-07-18, 03:45
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The lyrics aren't to bad, a bit Satanistic, will they be Deathgrowled, or Clean Voxed?
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2004-07-18, 03:52
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no idea, I just... wrote it
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2004-07-18, 04:01
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lol... you don't have a band?
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2004-07-18, 04:05
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no band unfortunately. I said this on here before somewhere, but I'll say it again, the people I know who play drums, bass, etc, they are all into different music than me and would want to play punk songs or nu metal songs. Rather than playing shit music with them that I don't like, I just stay home, play guitar, and listen to music.
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2004-07-18, 04:17
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Originally Posted by Brutally_Hacked
no band unfortunately. I said this on here before somewhere, but I'll say it again, the people I know who play drums, bass, etc, they are all into different music than me and would want to play punk songs or nu metal songs. Rather than playing shit music with them that I don't like, I just stay home, play guitar, and listen to music.
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Take up Bass and Drums and do your own Vox, and u got a band 
Were do u live? maybe there are some people who live near you who use mt.com
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2004-07-18, 04:21
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I doubt they would be. I'm in a small town, far from any city, and even if people here did go on MT, they all hate me and I hate them, so it makes no difference
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2004-07-30, 00:36
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i liked it. it reminds me of the kinda stuff i write, cept i can't rhyme worth shit. i like your other stuff, but i like this better. has a more epic, thoughtful edge. and as always your rhyming is great. check out the poem i wrote and let me know what you think/suggestions on makin it better |
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