I carry with me my most special toy
A toy for a man, not a little boy
A blade for which Id gladly die
Then In the park I suddenly spy
So sweet, so fresh, so virgin fair
The wind breezing through her hair
Such a picture of perfect grace
A smile stretched across her face
Such a prize I have to own
And with a short, impatient groan
I make my way down to the park
And dragged the child off to the dark
Now I have her in my lair
Slashing off her perfect hair
I hold my toy up to her eyes
So she can see what'll end her life
My knife trails gently down her throat
And, forgive me, I dont mean to boast
But what I did to her took skill
You need to know just how to kill
I peirced her flesh and heard her scream
I feel so free, this must be a dream
With a twist and with a pull
I used my wonderful new tool
To rip her throat onto her chest
But that's not why this kill's the best
She didnt die just yet, you see
It's best the meat is fresh to eat
To the stove I dragged the child
And with her screaming loud and wild
I sliced her flesh to smaller size
That was when my victim died
I cooked her nicely, cooked her well
Such a taste they do not sell
I sank my teeth into the meat
The blood dripping to my feet
For such a taste you have to kill
I gladly take life for my fill.

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Hehe nice one! Made me laugh a bit. Some people might consider it shocking though

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too disturbing even for me. thats the kind of stuff that will get your concerts protested

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Another quality Brutally_Hacked lyric. Dude, u really have to start a band, you would be famous just for ur lyrics, even if not ur music. Keep up the posting of new lyrics, thats talent

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Yeah, it has IT there...
Check up on the syllable count...
8/10
Pretty good.

whoo people like it

I'll post more... eventually

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Make a Gore/Grind band unsing them lyrics.

Nah, if I were to make a band (there are no good band worthy people here except my friend, and two guitarists dont make a band) it would likely be death or black type music. Although, there would be problems, since my friend is a punk-obsessed person. Punk, that's not good, not for me anyway.

Gone a little off topic... but still

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I just dropped out of a 2 piece band

We shredded dude, until the other guitarist (we had a drum machine, programmed to sound like real drummer) just went all dumb and didnt put his heart into it.

But anyway, yeah, we are off topic...

well two guitarists could make a band, but not we two guitarists. we are broke, have no drum machine... it'd be a total dud, so there's no point trying, hehe

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as sick as your lyrics are they are very well written and easy to follow

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and soon i shall take over the world!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
or perhaps just... write some more lyrics.

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hahahaha

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Grotesquely awesome

And you live pretty close to me too

Mmmmm... Ever hear of a man named Albert Fish? He would have loved this song.

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Ohhh fuck dude, i read this to my mum, and told her i liked it, and she thinks im insane. she's seriously like
"if i ever hear u singing that song, you can basically move out. I will not tolerate that level of disgusting shit in my house. Do you think thats funny? a little girl being killed and canabalised?"
I'm like whoahhhh mum, chillll, its not like she actually went out and killed someone... anyway, if my mum hates it, it must be good, e.g she hates cannibal corpse (dunno why ) and she doesnt mind Linkin Park, which means its shit

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hahahah!

my mum hates cannibal corpse too. And dying fetus. And gorgoroth... samael... dark tranquility. Nile... Lets just say she hates everything I listen to.

I've got all these songs by the frankenstein drag queens and their lyrics are all about horror movies/killing people/necrophilia, and they sing clearly so you can hear the lyrics. My mum chucked a psyche when she heard it. "you've got a six year old brother, he doesnt need to listen to this shit"

hehe, I'm pushing that kid in the right direction by letting him listen to it. She doesn't understand that. *shrugs*

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Hhahah yeh, i just got YELLED at for reading my nine year old sister the one about the crypt and the corpse and taking the girl instead
FUCK YEAH!!!!
She likes Opeth, and doesnt mind Slayer i also have a 12 yr old brother, but he sucks, only like metallica, the poser, and RHCP, Sex Pistols and more crap

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Ah, I have a friend (well more like an associate than a friend) who thinks he's so punk because he likes the sex pistols and the misfits. I don't understand why he would want to be a "punk", much less why he thinks listening to those bands will make him one...

You really got yelled at? Haha *points and laughs* sounds like you're having fun, hehe

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Well, this 45 year old mother got scolded by her 24 year old so last night for reading something about shootings and a crazy old lady bum in Detroit ! Of course, it supposedly happened so there was a bit of a difference, but still the old lady said she was pregnant and pulled up her shirt to expose what wasn't a baby but an obvious beergut. So the kids it happened to gave her 4 cents and she screamed at them ! I thought it was funny.

And I like Lucid Interval by Cannibal Corpse. It's funky sounding that's why I like it. Never paid much attention to the lyrics though. I'll read them sometime.

And a hint to you guys from the old broad? Please, use discretion when you subject your siblings and other tender ears to things. You may do more damage than you can understand. I'm all for exposure to a broad range of music for you as well as those around you, but have some respect.

A lot of the stuff I listen to now is stuff I've heard my kids playing like In Flames, Opeth, Morbid Angel, Type O Negative. I still can't stomach Marylin Manson even though he's a fellow Ohioan. His music is good, but his lyrics suck the big weinie as far as I'm concerned. He's a showboat I'd class with David Lee Roth. (I don't like him either.)
And my kids listen to some things I brainwashed into their heads while still in the womb so we have a lot of diffenent venues to satisfy our whims and moods around here. From Gregorian chants to my weird new age stuff and everything inbetween --except country which we ban in this house -yuck.

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that rocked

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i love how easy it was to read this. i allowed me to Perfectly play out the whole story from start to finish

i just read it again, three times in a row. write more like this, please. and soon.

I don't understand how she's screaming not only after he sliced her throat, but again after he tore it out. Maybe I'm a stickler for details.

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meh

when is more going to be written? I know the thread is like a year old but still - i guess quality over quantity......

woah, i thought it was new, but i havnt been to this forum in a looong time, since before last week anyway.

In that case, BrutallyHacked, youve got some serious catching up to do.

If pigs and sheep can still scream like crazy while their throat is slit and inside out Im sure people can too; since afterall, they are lower life forms than us. But then again, my family always reached in and tore out their screaming tools.

I don't know whether to freak out or laugh. I think I'll do both just to be safe. I also must find a way to resist the uncontrollable urge to sahemesly steal your lyrics. haha, just kidding, I wouldn't really do that. maybe without your knowledge but not publicly like this. hahaha.
good job, easy to read, flows naturally, very powerful imagery. the title is quite deceiving, I thought this was gonna be some joke or something.