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2004-06-27, 22:53
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"Distraught" --like I said I would
Okay, this is a little darker themed. I said I'd try to do my next one in this flavor. I'm in one of those moods anyways and I' m listening to Opeth" In the Mist She was Standing" . It didn't come out quite as I wanted it to, but words are hard to fit together right now. Comments appreciated as always.
"Distraught"
Delve into the other world where I was once at home
Take my words and seal my lips as if they never existed
Trap my arms beside me so I cannot reach
Fear where once there was none reclaims me once again
I feel as an infant in a forest of dark wood
I feel as a blind man on the raging river's edge
Shimmers of strands of blue violet wave
As I see the world I knew disappearing
Something icy fingered is crawling up my spine
It pulls the skin downward with it's weight
And wants me to gaze at the heaven above
But my heaven is no more
I'm trapped and speechless
Resonate pulse thunderous in temples
Til I can stand no more and scream
Ripping the binding with my teeth
Bleeding inside, dying inside
Full of emotion and yet so numb
A new morning begins and I peer from the window
Bright sun is glowing and melodious birds stir from their slumber
I sit in my room and stare outside
I seem devoid of pleasure or pain
I cry inside but show no tears
I'm anatomically alive but my heart is ceasing to be
BJH
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2004-06-28, 11:03
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Life is pain.
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Yeah... You know... it's there, but... kinda not.
It just didn't grab me.
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2004-06-28, 13:40
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it's not YOU Gram, write something that comes from you, not these other songs, then your stuff will shine.
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Crying from the womb, I’m hating you
Burning from the pain, I chase after you,
Seething from the fake, I’m catching you,
Chasing after ghosts, I’m killing you.
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2004-06-28, 14:42
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Well, it was me, but the words just weren't being co-operative in my thought process. It was called reflective at my forum and that was sort of the way I was thinking it to be. I was trying to evoke a mood at the time, but it missed the mark. Maybe I have to dig deeper to get where I wanted it to be. Hmm...
Thanks for your comments though. I appreciate it.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2004-06-28, 22:33
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I am a tax on the world..
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I thought it was cool.
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
 
This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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2004-06-28, 22:39
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Thanks. You're about due for another one out aren't ya , powers' ?
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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