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2004-06-03, 05:57
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The Bubonic Plague
wretched carrions of malformed rot.
oozing with pus and producing the Plague.
spreading through the city.
slowly dying diseased cling to each other in hope.
Boils become bloated and explode seeping soul destroying sludge.
flesh eating insects are called to do their masters bidding to end the lives of the tortured.
ghouls reign through the muggy streets filled with the dead.
stealing the riches of the damned.
pieces of the bodies are severed while the ghouls plunder.
signing their souls to the devil in the process.
the molten sun scorches the town.
the corpses begin to cook and open with infestation.
the stench is in equalibrium to the disgust of the unburied.
the city gates trap the survivors to wait for their death.
starving remnants struggle to escape this hell.
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2004-06-03, 15:40
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Yeah, okay. I presume you didn't write that for a song did you? I'm repulsed by it. I don't know why, it might just be the title. Yeah, that's it. I would call it something like "The Black Death" I think that would make sense, seeing as it was called the black death, but also because i think what you want to convey is more of the death part, not the plague part.
"flesh eating insects are called to do their masters bidding to end the lives of the tortured." hah. see The Torture Chamber. that's funny. torture just keeps appearing all over. hmmmmmm....wonder why that is.
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2004-06-03, 15:42
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Originally Posted by rapeandruin
wretched carrions of malformed rot.
oozing with pus and producing the Plague.
spreading through the city.
slowly dying diseased cling to each other in hope.
Boils become bloated and explode seeping soul destroying sludge.
flesh eating insects are called to do their masters bidding to end the lives of the tortured.
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ha! This was great!  Funny...
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2004-06-03, 23:19
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I wrote it in class on day after reciting a poem intitled Necrosis to a friend of mine. Yeah black death could work but bubonic plague just came to mine and its the same thing either way.
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2004-06-04, 13:19
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Whatever. I just thought the title didn't fit, but it's your piece, so, whatever suits you. I thought you had some good stuff going on there though.
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2004-06-04, 15:26
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eheheh...that makes me really not want to eat dinner.
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2004-06-05, 13:41
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Why? are you having meatloaf or something? I don't think there's ever been a time when I didn't want to eat dinner.
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2004-06-09, 20:36
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Me either. I watch murder and mayhem shows all the time with Denny and munch pizza and stuff. It depends on what degree of grossness it is though.
This really didn't trip my trigger , but it's just a personal preference thing. I did read it though and it does have a pretty good flow of thoughts to it. I'm not sure how close to the Bubonic plague it actually is so I won't comment on that part.
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2004-06-10, 00:54
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it was all from memory no real info about the bubonic plague. I.e. i wasn't looking in a book getting info then writing.
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2004-06-10, 01:12
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Maybe you should do a little research on it then just to keep from having it be misinformation OR you could make up your own plague name and that way you could have happen whatever you want. I saw a show on the history channel about it but don't remember the details.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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