Sitting alone atop my muzzled kingdom
Chained down with the irons of Hell
Where the silence flows in the wind
As everything leaves and nothing comes

Turning to the window pane with a lust
A lust for a new beginning a new sky
For dark clouds are covering my eyes
As the leaves fall from the dying woods

And as the forest green become a burnt gray
And the birds stop their lovely chant
A dark tear rolls off my chin to soak my shirt
As I sit here, alone among the clouds

Hear my wish for a second life with you
Churning through my mind for all this time
For all this time I have waited, for you
I cry deep ambers for a second chance for you

I loved the smell of your breath kissing me
The way you laughed and cried by me always
The way you smiled and embraced me in silence
An embrace cast out that shall never return

Oh, heaven above the stars, where is my life
My life I'd give for her sweet voice again
As I stare into the protrait on the wall
Staring deep into my painted eyes...of red

And now as I tear my face from the wall
I regard about the floor for her place of rest
To touch her for the last time before I leave
Just as the leaves die away from trees of winter

Blessed am I and ready to die? Alone in here?
Who knows how my end will govern the living
Where is my tool of death? Of what will govern
My safe passege to the forest of my dreams

And so in the end of a life that I have made
To trip the wire and fall to your oustretched hands
Peircing a chamber of heart and blood oozing from
As I lie by your side and Rest..In...Peace.

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"Turning to the window pane with a lust
A lust for a new beginning a new sky
For dark clouds are covering my eyes
As the leaves fall from the dying woods" love this, man, it's just so cool. you get nice imagery when you use the word lust in that context.
"Where the silence flows in the wind" nice, it gives it a very liquidyish feel, but more of a "flowing" feel (imagine that!)

Could you tell me why you used the phrase "I cry deep ambers..." ?

"I loved the smell of your breath kissing me
The way you laughed and cried by me always
The way you smiled and embraced me in silence
An embrace cast out that shall never return"

That was pretty much perfect in emotional imagery and wording. Very, very nice. And I liked the rise in tone of the next passage. It inhaled deeply and exhaled in the next verse.

I could go on about the rhythm of the voice in this , but I won't. I think you have some very good imagery. It's very dark and yet it has those romantic elements in it, too. I liked it. Again you've painted a nice picture.

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*shrug*
I guess "ambers" as in redish-brown...

...dang, you guys seems to like the parts differently than me. I only liked the 1st and 3rd ones...huh...

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I knew it was reddish-brown to golden colored so I was curious why you picked it. Since you go on further to say that the eyes of the portrait are painted red maybe it would be better to have the tears eluding to that color hue. I dunno.

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"Peircing a chamber of heart and blood oozing from
As I lie by your side and Rest..In...Peace." powers, you might not like this, but this is awesome... i can definitely hear the guitars cutting out after a really hot riff right before the R.I.P. and then it being screamed, hollow and empty, like there was nothing else left, and this was just your last dying gift to a that person who took everything else, and all meaning from your life.
again, nice.

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