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2004-04-07, 22:11
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New Blood
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Join Date: Apr 2004
Location: Gothenburg, Sweden
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no name
"Suicide selfblitzkreig,
Life in all it's meaninglessness,
Quickly ended.
Forever floating in the astral,
Selfdestructive enlightment reached.
Two twin steel barrels
Set you free.
Forehead passage know open,
Your goal is reached."
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2004-04-07, 22:24
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Post-whore
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Join Date: Mar 2004
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I like it. I wish it were a little longer but at least it flows well unlike a lot of the other lyrics here. Pretty harsh stuff, gives me chills.
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2004-04-07, 22:29
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New Blood
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Join Date: Apr 2004
Location: Gothenburg, Sweden
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Ego boost..thanks..yes it is a little bit short...lack of ideas...
I was a bit inspired my burzum - my journey to the stars...(the whole astral thing)
but I shall make it longer... or perhaps go a little "mayhem like", much music, barely any lyrics ..but nice anguishing screams... |
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2004-04-07, 22:30
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Post-whore
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Join Date: Mar 2004
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Yup keep it up dude
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2004-04-08, 13:07
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Join Date: Jan 2003
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I'm not here to fuck up anyone's ego. It's not a piece I'd purchase because of the lyrical content, but if the music was cool I would. That's just personal preference. Your wording was good and and it flowed well so as for the technicalities I'd say you did well. It's just not my thing lyrically.
And 'astral' will always belong to Gary Wright's "Dream Weaver".A really cool song from my day. No offense, but I think it sounds funny in metal songs.
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2004-04-08, 23:16
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Join Date: Apr 2004
Location: Gothenburg, Sweden
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hehe ok..thanks
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