...But you're welcome to give me idea's of some.

Once upon a midnight sun, on a dark and dreary eve
Came an acid quake of fun, made of death quite the peeve
Past the time has come, the time my flesh burned away
For death has hummed a tune that will raise your spine today

Cast into a box of gold and black as the night I am
As my acid trip is a story told, a story of the damned
I thrilled and killed and thrilled again or so the tall tale was
Broken down and riled up on that night of fever’s buzz

Images of past thorns were laced within my deepest stature
For I had fallen in a spell created by my nature
Sewn together and my face distressed as I fall apart
Together, we murdered and killed until we died and did depart

Liquid pain shown through my soul as it was on my epitaph
Unlucky I was not for when I died I cried out “ha!”

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Hey there! This had a lot better flow than when I read it before and I see there was an edit so I'm wondering about that. Man, I liked this 'terror. It's going in my notebook of keepers that I hard copy. It's so dark and sarcastic. I really thought it was perfect. No shit.

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You seem to have an natural talent for this shit.

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Doesn't he? Some people just seem to capture the right words and make it sound effortless. I HATE PEOPLE LIKE THAT !!!!

Just kidding, p'o'terror.

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You people are weird.

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No I'm just retarded

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And ,I ,for one, am darn proud of it ! It took me 45 years to perfect my weirdness. I do it and I do it well, I'm told. But, hey, I don't have anything about flonging my dong in my signature. Now who'd weird ?????? Oh ,wait I don't have one anyways .

Your verse was good. Before I knew you liked Poe, I kept getting a Poe feeling from it because of the way the first 2 lines sound. And I kept wanting to call it "The Craven" before I knew you liked "The Raven" . But I finally located my dictionary and found out that means "coward" so that wouldn't fit I don't think. ( "The Cravin ' " , maybe????) But since you have some drug topic in there I was thinking "Acid Poe" , "Trippin' Poe" , "Hooked on Poe" ..... I dunno...I'm tired and I think I need sleep. Even just "Once Upon a Midnight Sun" doesn't sound bad for a title.

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how are acid quakes fun?

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I would think by having the first line, it's going to be about sonthing dark or grim. "Came an acid quake of fun, made of death quite the peeve," speaks for itself. It's sarcasm dude. Killing yourself with acid is quite an annoyance, wouldn't you think so? OoooOO, sounds like fun. It was just another way of saying, "tripping on acid."

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