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Old 2003-06-25, 15:31
Incantation Incantation is offline
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Lyrics, "golden palace of lust"

These are lyrics i just kinda flopped together, i dont rally want any ones comment, i dont care, but if you want to go ahead, but chances are i wont be reading this again,


Golden Palace Of lust

I Awoke in a place.
Far away i could tell.
Caught in a land of my own creation.
Scared But assured, i was home now.

It was a village.
Of many people.
Seemed as if it were an ancient time.
I wandered what seemed like.
A Square of some sort.

And at that moment, a woman came up to me.
You have been expected, she said.
we must go now.

(Chorus)
Caught in a dream.
My home now.
Of a place so Great.
GOLDEN PALACE OF LUCIFER.
Not in a spell, this is reality.
GOLDEN PALACE OF LUST.

The sun was Black as the sky above.
I followed the mistress to a Golden Temple.
The naked Mistress turned to me and said.
Welcome now, We shall Celebrate.


The structre was mamoth.
It Was almost catching the stars.
I followed her up
The Bronze Colored Stone steps.
We passed many
Golden Gargoyles surronding the temple.

(chorus)


As we entered the Shrine
i was beggining to feel
Feel something comeing over me.
I felt like an animal, As we got deeper
In this place.

The Halls were of gold
And marble floor.
Sculptures of great demons surronded me.

The Blood flowed like wine
From a Fountain, i had to Drink.

The mistress took me.
And Seduced me,
i gave in to temptation.

Iam finally free
I understand this place Now.
I'am in hell.


last (chorus)


I came To a dark room.
A horned figure in the shadows.
He was on a Golden Throne
He said unto me.
We have won the war.
A war in itself, helped to create.
We celebrated life, as i know it now.
In to the Darkness.
Into The Golden Palace of lust.
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Old 2003-06-25, 16:57
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I hear black metal/power behind this one, not necessarily my type of lyrics, seems more like a story you would read than a song, just my opinion...
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Old 2003-06-25, 19:10
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Yeah i can see how it would be Power metalish, I wasnt goin for anything.
Its just about a dream i had not so long ago.
Lyrics arent my thing, i just play guitar,
but thanks for the opinion
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Old 2003-06-26, 06:29
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you used a lot of periods.
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Old 2003-06-26, 12:34
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It might not be a bad story line, but it needs some balancing to me. I think the phrasing is a little mixed up and there are periods in some of the wrong places, but maybe you were trying to get the effect of a pause there.
It had some colorful imagery but it sounded like a movie synopsis. I'm sure you could get this a little more organized and have a decent metal piece though. I do think the naked woman makes it take a step down to teen-dream level though. Leave a little to the imagination and you'll get a wider audience.
Hope that helps somewhat.
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