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2003-06-25, 00:44
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Human wrights
New song I wrote about 2 min. ago, I thought the idea of people making humans sounded cool so I wrote about it, still kinda rough
Human wrights
Come down to the inside
Lie down, life awaits you
Bright as day yet cold as night
Lifeless, your limbs we’ll choose
Their steel coffins
Allowing no breath to escape
Of the bodies, their limbs we’ll cleanse
Dismembering rape
Avoiding opposition, new lives at stake
Artisans of new life
Conception is not a must
Creation with the blade of a knife
No deity to look for
Craftsman you will trust
Look upon these walls
Empty souls hanging freely
Back to their bodies they call
Electricity and thread
All that is needed
To bring back the dead
Operation is underway
The scalpel I clench
The wondrous stench
Reeking of decay
Paracentesis is how it begins
Ostium of the peritoneum
Looking just below the skin
Making sure of the organs within
Bullet wound to the bregma
The cranium we must replace
Giving appearance a new face
No more is your facial stigma
Over time the taenia was destroyed
Put into motion by a round to the brain
Finding another will be no bother
Receiving nothing but personal gain
Placing everything intact
Assuring the musculation
Is the more to give back?
Disgusted they’ll view you
Nothing but degredation
Giving thanks to death
Corpses united by syssarcosis
Charged with electricity
Hoping to get a breath
Admiring our foetus
Morbid deities we are
Inside our mental veil
Life we won’t starve
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2003-06-25, 12:23
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cool.
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
 
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2003-06-25, 18:17
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Again, good choices of words.
Keep the good work coming.
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Those who speak don't know"
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2003-06-25, 19:28
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It's above me vocabularywise. It did have some interesting moments though. I just can't picture some metalhead screaming this one. Especially one that's drunk and trippin' .  But that's just my opinion.
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2003-06-25, 21:50
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Wow, thanks for the compliments. As for LB, I had no idea what those words meant 10 min. before I wrote the song, thanks to the dictionary for that.
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2003-06-26, 11:32
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i hear that, i do it all the time.
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Man, I get real sweaty after I wack my dong. Yeah, cause I headbang while I do, and I can't really "Jump" (haha ) like VanHalen in a dorm room, so I just walk back and forth....haha a couple days ago I was jumping up and down on my bed, with my pants down and my roommate came in when I wasn't looking, hahaha.
This is my band's page
http://www.myspace.com/ferocitydentontx
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2003-06-26, 17:42
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Aw, power'o't , I just gave you a compliment about your pieces in your thread. I thought you were a creative genius. Well, I guess if you can make it NOT sound like you used a dictionary you are a genius.
Don't let that go to your head though.
I just can't hear , for instance, Wally, stupid on JD singing this:
"Paracentesis is how it begins
Ostium of the peritoneum"
Although that might be quite amusing now that I think about it. He'd probably say , "Aw, f*ck that part." heehee
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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