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Old 2003-06-03, 19:55
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my second attempt " a dead issue"

the name is only temporary untill somethink better comes to mind

"A dead issue"

You always left one door to take me in
Even with your eye’s that feel remorse.
I left you drowning in a river of my thoughts
Not knowing I was the one you sought.

And when the sun didn’t shine
I was worried that you wouldn’t be mine.
My emotions are somewhat a dead issue
But you always helped me wrestle with it.

You said I was number one
Yet it always felt like I was last in line.
But you always knew if your walls came down
I would always be around

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Old 2003-06-07, 14:54
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I liked this quite a bit. THe only thing I thought was the actual idea of wrestling a dead issue. To me a dead issue would be a limp dishrag sort of thing and that wouldn't be hard to toss around. But the rest of the song had a good flow to it and was very enjoyable reading storywise. One of the things that I found appealing was the subtle psychological bits throughout. Nice job.







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Old 2003-06-09, 02:58
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thanxs for your reply, i wrote this one pretty quick but lots of thought went into it, i tried to write it personal but still so people could relate to it...........i will try n write more
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Old 2003-06-09, 03:36
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