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Old 2003-04-03, 08:09
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Lightbulb Finally a new one - the hurt they call friendship

Okay. a new one. took me a while to finish this one, it's more straight-forward then my usual work and it's a bit more depressive I guess, I hope you like it, comment away!




Fallen on my face
like the first time
knowledge discouraged
logics defeated!

there I Lie,
Bruised and Beaten,
Used and Bleeding,
REGRET!

to trust is pain
my pain breathes sour
this is my hour
when darkeness rages!

The smell of death
on everything I touch
Cost of Acceptance:
far to much......

your eyes,
They see the same as mine
I know you got to
feel the pain inside!

You just wanted me to know...
There is shelter
from the storm!

Now I don't understand you!
why you value me!
I'm forever grateful!
You brought release!
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Old 2003-04-03, 19:45
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I liked this a lot. Especially the very last stanza.
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Old 2003-04-04, 11:59
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Thanks

I loved the second verse the most myself but the last few are cool too, we might actually use this in a song, anyways, thanks for the feedback!
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Old 2003-04-07, 00:09
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this would sound awesome as a deathmetal song,
like chaos a.d.(sepultura) or CC.
singing wise, not actually the lyrics...
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Old 2003-04-07, 01:35
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yeah, it was intended as a doomish/hardcore/metal thingy, with indeed the same singing style as the older sepultura!
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Old 2003-04-08, 02:12
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i think these lrics are awesome, i was thinkin more of a this love approach towards it, cause these lyrics would sound unreal sung softly with a screamin growlin sort of chorus, still they good lyrics,
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Old 2003-04-08, 07:44
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yeh man i think those lyrics r really kool, chuck em in with a mad heavy song and ur set. Go hard or go home
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Old 2003-04-08, 14:21
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thanks guys, I'll probably use them for a song one day, I appreciate the feedback!
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Old 2003-04-08, 14:50
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im with you def, the second verse kicks! you really should use it in a song!
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