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Old 2008-11-18, 01:43
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An Eternity Deviod

This is my first time posting in this section, and I feel this set of lyrics needs a preface so it's more easily understood. My band is currently working on a concept album and this happens to fall about halfway through the story, but I feel it's a strong piece none the less. Prior to the begining of these lyrics a man has discovered the secret to immortality through a series of scientific studies and has kept that secret to himself. He's watched the final human other than himself die and has tried everything possible to kill himself and reverse his experiments but has just come to accept he's never going to die regardless of what he does. Now that's a very brief generalized description but it pretty well should have you all up to speed haha. Think Spawn of Possession for overall feel of the music.

Science was the answer

I lay awake
Dreams of sanity
But it's to late I am insane
Emotion boils over
For this eternity
I'll be deviod of humanity

(chorus1)
Never ending turmoil
It shouldn't have been like this, We should have all lived
Now I must grieve
For all eternity
I am the final human wasted not wasting

(chorus2)
Empty
In this reality where I lived I should've died
But I survive
Empty
Tormented by my choice to never die
Still I survive

Raped
Of all humanity and all that was inside of me, an eternity deviod
Trapped in an endless cycle of cataclysmic motion
Loss
Of my mortality no more human emotion, an eternity deviod
Self induced purgatory is all that's left for me

The only human that is left
A secret I should not have kept
To carry on eternaly
Wishing to fufill my last dream

my dream's to die

My dreams in vain
No human contact
This immortal contract sickens me
Now unfazed by all emotion
Deprivation
Is no way to live yet I cannot die

Chorus 1

chorus 2

Won't somebody set me free...
There's nobody
I'm trapped for eternity
There's nobody
Wish that I had never been
There's nobody
Framed by Immortality
Never to be

Gone
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Old 2008-11-19, 16:02
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It's not bad. It has high and low spots, but these 2 lines bugged me because one contradicts the other.
"This immortal contract sickens me
Now unfazed by all emotion"

Thanks for the explanation of the album. This does elude to that idea so you're on the right track.
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Old 2008-11-19, 16:16
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Looking at that line now sickens me haha I'm going to take out the "unfazed by all emotion" and find something else to fit. In context to the music the two lines don't 100% correspond to each other it's more broken up into 3 lines per message if that makes sence but I didn't end up taking the song where I had planned to after writing that line and made his emotions still strong throughout instead of dying out. Thank you very much for the input, I'll be sure to let everyone here know as soon as we've finished recording the song(we just finished the drum tracks for it).
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Old 2008-12-16, 01:35
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My band now has the song up on our myspace. Link in sig.
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Old 2008-12-16, 02:28
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It's "devoid", not "deviod". You should fix that, because you have an interesting concept, and incredibly annoying misspellings will prevent people from taking it seriously. As for the concept, I smiled as I read it, because I can't tell you how many times I've pondered the paradox of immortality in both daydreams and night dreams. I'm sure most people have, and thusly can relate to the main character.
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Old 2008-12-16, 10:04
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Fixed haha. Thanks.
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Old 2008-12-19, 23:42
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Unphased not fazed
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Old 2008-12-19, 23:50
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No, it's unfazed. Phase is a different word.
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