I was really feeling hateful so I let some of it out in this little gem:

The Art of Genocide


annihilation
carnage
decimation
holocaust

execution
massacre
mutilate
destroy


obliterate
execute
extermination
immolation

devastation
catastrophic
exctinction
assassination

genocide

genocide

genocide

crits?

Would you look at that, he wasn't feeling frustrated or angry, but "really hateful".


Oh yeah, you don't really know the meaning of the word "immolation" do you?

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this is just a bunhcof cool words.
Crits?
i would say, the dictionary is good.
that's the most i can crit this.
there's nothing really there

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A flaming wrath?

Why do you ask? Or was that an attempt at insult...

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no.
it doesn't mean flaming wrath

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Im·mo·la·tion
n.

[L. immolatio: cf. F. immolation.]

1. The act of immolating, or the state of being immolated, or sacrificed. Sir. T. Browne.


2. That which is immolated; a sacrifice.


3. Destruction by fire.

That's pretty much flaming wrath.

Tell me i'm wrong?

wrath is anger,not destruction.
stop sucking

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I will say it has a decent rhythm, if anything.

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'A flaming wrath' makes very little sense and isn't what 'immolation' means. Since wrath isn't something physical, it's very hard to set on fire, for starters.

I don't see anything really hateful. This is a laundry list.

Wow sorry for not being exact but anybody without their head up their ass would know what I meant.

I know metal can be technical, but I didn't think metalheads would be technical to the point of being linguisitic fascists.

Are you ready to look up the definition for fascism and try to correct me on more semantics?

Maybe you should stop wearing ladies panties because it seems they're crawling up on you.

Cheers,


p.s. for anybody who's not paying attention to the bullshit in this thread the type of music I was imagining for these lyrics is a thrashy sepultura-esque type of metal.

forgive me for appreciating dedication and quality.
i'll just try to accept your obviously half-assed lyrics as an 'output for angst'

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My dearest darling TitaniumSaviour,

I fear from your last letter that there have been several miscommunications, and hope that the present correspondence can help to clear them up:

It's not that we want perfection. just that we just want you to make a little bit of effort if you expect us to read these. You're always free not to post.

And as for 'immolation,' I personally didn't care if you knew what it meant or not to begin with, but once you'd guessed, checked the dictionary, and seen that your guess was incorrect, it would be best for all involved if you'd acknowledged that rather than perpetuating an argument out of foolish e-pride.

By the way, you might notice that no Sepultura song consists of nothing but semi-related words thrown together; even when they did something vaguely like this, they'd also throw in things like phrases, here andthere, to break up the monotony. As a chorus or bridge or something. Since the music you were imagining was hopefully not boring and monotonous, it would only be fair to make the lyrics similarly interesting.

In other words, you can't cite the music you haven't written as a reason the words you have are good.

And, finally, correcting your definition of a word and making fun of you are hardly fascistic. If you want to see some fascism, please ask and it will be provided for you at our earliest convenience.

Sincerely,
PST

you heard the man

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See now you could have just said my lyrics could have used some real content but instead you decided to be an asshole. I guess that's the whole 'anonymity of the internet making people assholes' thing though.

That's your choice, but if you're an asshole don't expect everyone just to take it up the ass from you.

this lyric blows.

That was one of the less asshole-like parts of that particular post. I said that your Sepultura defense wouldn't hold water as a justification for why the lyrics didn't have more content. It had already been noted that they needed some, so I didn't see any real reason why I should have repeated that particular nugget of wisdom. This is how an argument works in the thinking world.

And I'd happily say all this to you in person if you happen to be passing through Western NY.

Anyway, feel free to come back and post again when you've put enough effort into something to show it to people.