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Old 2002-10-07, 02:33
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well ... I just wrote this shit tonight ... and I wanted to post it ... I know it doesn't make any sense ... but here it goes ...



Here I am in the middle of an unknown forest
In the silence of the day that open arms to the night
while the crows of death fly to the forgotten land

Walking over a path of blood of Ancient Masters
onto the altars of stone
sacrifying old love songs

The swords shine before the eye of the moon fire
stabing the petals of the roses of your dead dreams

the pale and cold hands
of the children of night
dance between the shadows of light

She comes to play what she likes...
dance over sharp blades
while I drink a cup of wine
beheading childs ... screams ... buried in the graveyard ...
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Old 2002-10-07, 02:54
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its good to see people are getting a little more serious with wat they write. i liked it all although, were you stuck for ideas when you did;


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She comes to play what she likes...
dance over sharp blades
while I drink a cup of wine
beheading childs ... screams ... buried in the graveyard ...


not bad, but just seems as if you got stuck for ideas and turned something somewat poetic into a bit of a 'gore fest' hehe
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Old 2002-10-07, 05:12
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I had to be a kick in the ass, but you spelled "title" wrong.
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Through me you pass into the city of woe
Through me you pass into eternal pain
Through me among the people lost for ay
Justice the founder of my fabric moved
To rear me was the task of power divine
Supremest wisdom, and primeval love
Before me things create were none, save things
Eternal, and eternal I endure
All hope abandon, ye who enter here

Against the concert of the Immortals he cannot stand alone.
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Old 2002-10-07, 15:34
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nah dude, a tittle is a little tit. he was sayin he had no tittle.
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Old 2002-10-07, 17:16
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Oh, i wan unaware of that. Good job then!
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Through me you pass into the city of woe
Through me you pass into eternal pain
Through me among the people lost for ay
Justice the founder of my fabric moved
To rear me was the task of power divine
Supremest wisdom, and primeval love
Before me things create were none, save things
Eternal, and eternal I endure
All hope abandon, ye who enter here

Against the concert of the Immortals he cannot stand alone.
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Old 2002-10-10, 07:30
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i found "insane fucker" to be more into my liking
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Old 2002-10-18, 09:00
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i think its well written tho you do have some spelling mistakes. i didnt like the part with "petald of your roses ofyour dead dreams" the "ofs" make it sound harsh and slurred
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