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Old 2006-04-13, 19:34
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verse 1
Dead of mind, left and right
Shall I show them how to die?
They cry and fear and always fight
Fixed inside their twisted mind
Proof of worth...they die in pain?
Should I care or should I not?
They suffer from the worldly sane
Bleached with god are they not?

Let them die!

chorus
Bitter sweet is death renewed
Acid filth twisting
A taste I dream in all its crude
Filthy sword slicing
Within sight you must beware
Painted axe bleeding
It steals your soul to grind and tear
Melting fire burning

There're stilll 8 more lines to the chorus and another verse that has yet to be written and I'm stuck on it....
By the way, these are the lyrics to a song I recently wrote that has somewhere around 10 riffs and 2 solos.
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Old 2006-04-14, 06:34
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Oh, the one you changed from 600+ riffs? I remember. Why did you not add the 8 lines to the chorus here? It might give a better vibe on how to come up with another verse. It's not bad so far, but it needs a hook to me.
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Old 2006-04-15, 13:49
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Riffs and solos; but what style is it going to be?
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Old 2006-04-17, 09:36
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....Thrashy melodic deathmetal music with slayer style singing.
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