How can I better
Whats already said best?
Barren... Desolate... Abandoned...
Paranoid at this recollection.
A fault without detection?
And I just don't know what can be done to save or leave it...
I'm walking with my shadow.
There is no reaction.
And I know I just can't live without that interaction...
No hands to catch me.
No words to guide me.
A cloth can blind the most open eyes and make them hateful.
Mistakes are cast on play.
And theres no news today.
I may try but I will never repair this thing they say is next to my home.

What was your inspiration for this, if I may ask? It seems like there's a lost attitude in it, but I'm not sure where it's coming from. The strongest line to me was "A cloth can blind the most open eyes and make them hateful." That was pretty cool. Good flow to the piece. Very oceanlike rhythm.

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I liked the last line

Inspiration just the same as always relationship issues not only bf/gf though parents aswell

I just like writing about emotional trauma that way

I think it was the last line that threw me off because of the "next to my home" part. It sounds a bit like a wordier version of what I wrote a few days ago that was similar to your style. Not in a bad way, but just different.

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Well it has a direct relationship to a frequently used cliche/expression... .try working it out

I was picking up something of that effect. A couple of my pieces had been inspired from such. Not boy friend, girlfriend, but parents and friend issues, and work "buddies."



I like that set of lines. Mostly the last line. Reminds me of alot of .... similar feelings if you will.

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