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Old 2005-12-02, 11:12
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Thumbs up Don´t Cry for the shadows

Don´t Cry for the shadows

Like A Sculpture he stands the man that demands he can´t give and he wont forgive
The thin red line that tears my spine Where Did it Come From why did I lie

My sorrow is Growing my heart is not alive the anger not fading i can only die

I live the sadness and watch the madness , growl of darkness touch my ears

Fury of the mad makes us sad, deep depression makes infection

Stains of tears touch the fears, burning silence now it all came clear

Shadows rise,roll the dice unspoken minds kill the signs "of life"

Darkness layng the distance.........



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Old 2005-12-02, 12:46
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Amazing.....man......keep up the good writing......bitch
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Old 2005-12-02, 13:43
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See? Told you it had potential.

Hitta nu bara på någon lämplig Megadeth-inspirerad - till exempel - musik att lägga till så har du en riktig låt.
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Old 2005-12-02, 13:49
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Stains of tears touch the fears, burning silence now it all came clear

Shadows rise,roll the dice unspoken minds kill the signs "of life"

Darkness layng the distance.........


Check spelling the last line. Maybe "comes" instead of "came"? Oh, I see now how "came" fits, never mind.
Those final lines really got a good punch; I tried reading them out loud and I liked the feeling of them; both technically and for what they convey.

OK, you death metallers can say what you like about this, but:
Please tell me you are not going to make a growl out of this?
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Old 2005-12-02, 14:03
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Fán va shyst asså altid gött med bra respons....vi ska inte gö ett growl av låten vi spelar trash med små inslag av death....

bara så du vet så va gitaristen i bandet me å skrev lite okså han vill gärna att ja ska säga det
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Old 2005-12-02, 14:28
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Äras den som äras bör, jojo.
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Old 2005-12-02, 15:22
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Not bad at all. Good to see you added more to it. I still think that dividing up the phrases would make it easier to get the feel, but that's my own preference.
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Old 2005-12-02, 15:51
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thank's allways god to get some credit.....
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Old 2005-12-02, 16:21
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Old 2005-12-03, 06:19
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Old 2005-12-03, 06:30
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Hitta nu bara på någon lämplig Megadeth-inspirerad - till exempel - musik att lägga till så har du en riktig låt.


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