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Old 2005-11-30, 21:22
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Think of Yesterday

Split into 2 posts AGAIN. Thanks for reading.

"Think of Yesterday"

I'll sit here and drink my wine
Think of you and all the things you said to me
I can't really smile and feel glad where the story led
Because I don't know if it led anywhere
You told me of all the brighter days ahead
And the closeness we'd feel every day
Time has its way of making changes

Did I destroy any dreams you had for tomorrow
Couldn't we face the day in a strength that binds lifetimes
Always in my heart the gifts you gave
Things I gave to you were real and not pretend
You will always be my dearest friend
Would I go this distance over again
I don't think that's a question that needs an answer
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Old 2005-11-30, 21:22
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I'll sit and drink my wine
And think of you
Think of me
Think of us
Think of tomorrow
Because sometimes it's just too hard to think of yesterday

Sometime things may be different
There may be a door that we can travel through
But we have to take exactly what's offered us by fate
And be glad or at least satisfied
You can't always follow road you want to

BJH
11/30/2005
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Old 2005-12-01, 03:51
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For some reason I constantly end up commenting on your contributions here... guess I'm just glad to finally find somewhere to discuss these things.

My first impression was that it is meant for reading and thinking rather than singing. It also feels very personal. Not disturbingly so at all, but from start to end it gives me the feeling of sharing something important.

It doesn't show in writing, but I've been sitting here for ten minutes reading and thinking. And know I know what it was I felt as well after reading it the first time - this makes for a beatiful stage monologue. It has honesty and it has feeling. That passus;

I'll sit and drink my wine
And think of you
Think of me
Think of us
Think of tomorrow
Because sometimes it's just too hard to think of yesterday

is also exactly right from a technical point of view.

But in the end, let me make it clear that my lasting impression is that of sharing something important. I'm honored.
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Old 2005-12-01, 07:20
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I was going for a monologue type song so you nailed the idea. I wasn't sure about the broken thoughts or if they would sound okay, but they're meant to be more like speech would be. At least mine in my head.
There's a song by Strawbs' called "How I Need You" that's always been a powerful monologue song for me. They've been one of my favorite bands for more than 30 years. (Man, does that sound weird! I'm not that old! heehee)

I'm glad you liked the piece. And I, too, have been very glad to find a couple good sites to not only share pieces, but to get input on them. It makes for stronger writing and sometimes others point out little mistakes or give other ideas. Not to mention inspiration from the pieces others share sometimes.

Thanks again.

I lied! Upon looking at the Strawbs' lyrics for something else I discovered the song I mentioned is called "Absent Friend." Sorry about that.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!

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Old 2005-12-02, 14:37
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not my kind of lyrics but very good written.....read my band lyrics....Don't cry for the shadowes and see what you think......
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Old 2005-12-02, 15:28
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Thanks. I just read and commented on yours.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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