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Old 2005-07-27, 16:52
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Primordial Decease ERRR!

(Growls/Screams)
The failure to premeditate
Veritably concealed the corallory
Atonement? Never.
The Failure to extrapolate*
Odiously commited deeds unsatisfactory
Punishment? Find 'em

(Clean)
'Cause the remains decay now
Deep within an abyssmal bivium
(A residual recollection of what once was near)
We seek the answers some how
To questions that putter our minds, until numb
(A false miscalculation of the demons we fear)


RAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! (EEEEYAAAAAAAAA!)<-- Those are the growls and screams that go before the second verse which I've yet to write yet because I can't think of anything.

And yes, its a very ambiguous message so far, but the meaning is corny so I don't wanna say it heh
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Old 2005-07-27, 18:34
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Well, the main reason I'd like this is becase it would SOUND awesome really really fast. I'm not too fond of the word usage, but if you make the music for this FUKKING BRUTAL AS FUKK, I'll love it and make it my wedding song.
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Old 2005-07-27, 19:59
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Dammit! Speak English! And is the title spelled right? I'm not sure if it's dead or supposed to be on the way to it.
Well, heck if you're growling/screaming anyways only a handful that have read the lyrics are gonna know what they are anyhow.

Just being bitchy. I'll probably feel guilty about it and hit dictionary.com tomorrow and look up words I don't know and reread it and comment again.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
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Old 2005-07-27, 20:06
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Heh the first part it all growled and screamed anyway

The part in parentheses during the 2nd stanza is screamed btw. I may record the song soon and post it.

I was looking more forward to reading your critique metal mom
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Old 2005-07-27, 20:17
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Anyway this is one of the many interlude's lyrics, hot off the press might I add...

Then that night
Taken our site
Broken our hearts
Humanity's blind

We're betrayed (by ourselves)
These days, so strange
When the next era rises
So falls our lives

Sound the knell
The bane is wisdom's spell
Entralled upon we (<---yea that sucks but wanted to keep with the rhyme)
So now life receeds.

Grievances will pass
Tomorrow we're all gone
Discovery's false beauty
Is our downfall


Perhaps shedding a bit more light on the message
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Old 2005-07-27, 20:37
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Well, make me feel guilty already. Darn kids. I hate kids. That's gonna be my next song. Headbanger I Hate Kids Song.

omg, well, I was gonna put all the dictionary.com definitions in brevity for all that I deciphered from this tantalizing piece of lyrical jollity that you graced us with to contemplate in further confabulation. Upon further contemplation I thought, fuck that, if I can look it up so can the rest of ya.

It does have a bit of a flow to it in thought pattern once you figure out wth that is. Are you sure "bivium" is the word you want to use there? I did break an ambulacrum yesterday although I didn't know that until just now. It was just a little one and it had been in wax that I'd softened in the sunny window. I'm not sure where the word I'd been uncertain with fits in, but maybe once you write some more it will. Use the Junior dictionary to write the next part. I can't picture enibriated metalheads try to sing this .... wait... no nevermind. Yes, I can. Key word "try."
Carry on with it.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-07-27, 20:38
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I'm going to strangle you. I finish the first part and already there's more!


cont: Do you mean enthralled in that one part? Could you use the word sea instead of we to keep the rhyme? It would also elude to the first part if I'm getting what you're talking about.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!

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Old 2005-07-27, 20:41
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Hah the only word I had to look up so far was "Putter" because I wasn't sure if it was spelled as "Pudder"

But yea, I'm sort of trying to go for that big word, sophisticated pattern
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Sophisticated bullshit is more like it.


I'm just teasing you. Once in awhile it's okay and some people really can read and write this kind of stuff with no problem. I'm just not one of them. I'm more like .
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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