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Old 2005-07-12, 00:36
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The Penguinmen Stomp On Our Hearts

This one is odd, it is somewhat inspired by my current situation and other things. Just bits and pieces of thoughts coming together. There are 3 actors in this song, and I will highlight them with different colours.
Observer
Penguinmen
Prisoner


The Penguinmen Heighten The Pressure
On Our Hearts And Minds
They Increase It To Three Hundred Kilopascals


These ready-to-eat concentrates will be the staple food for your soul
Please adhere to our thought paradigm
We do not take kindly to deviations
You may suffer from our obvious paradox


I'm so amorous that I'm polyamorous
I request for myself a satanik funeral
There is blood on this tap, I think you've been using it...
Please release me from your self-evident legalities!
Let me remain a multifaceted dodecahedron!
I do not see how me being a sphere would benefit....


The penguinmen don football boots
So that they may stomp on our hearts
With a much greater efficiency


My deviancy will be acted on
They wield a diamond file of unwritten legalities
Six foot tall, all powerful penguinmen
Proceed and attempt to make me a sphere
I'm so amourous that I'm mega-amorous
Please release me from this nightmare
I wish to remain as I am
Please release me from this paradigm
I love myself as I am
and they stomp,stomp, stomp....



I was feeling very, very angry.
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Old 2005-07-12, 09:58
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id take this a hell of a lot more seriously if it wasnt penguins. unless that was intentional
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Old 2005-07-12, 10:47
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this is fucking weird..
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Old 2005-07-12, 11:00
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It sounds a bit like a more brutal version of Genesis' old stuff.
It wasn't bad, but I can't picture myself singing along with it. lol It had a good flow to it and the storyline had just enough structure that you could interpret to what you thought it was doing. Kinda weird but kinda cool ,too.
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Old 2005-07-12, 11:26
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I like the idea of the 3 different voices, not too sure about the content though
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Old 2005-07-13, 08:44
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The Penguinmen are intentional, and it's for a song that's not written in 4/4 but Meshuggah style messy, so no singy alongy feel like my other stuff.

Hmm, maybe I've made a bad choice when I represented those feelings/people as penguins, they just reminded me of penguins somewhat.

The 3 voices are there because everyone except one other person from my project skiddodled and I have one possible person on hold, so it's made for 3 people.

Yay.
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Old 2005-07-13, 10:29
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The Penguinmen are intentional, and it's for a song that's not written in 4/4 but Meshuggah style messy, so no singy alongy feel like my other stuff.

Hmm, maybe I've made a bad choice when I represented those feelings/people as penguins, they just reminded me of penguins somewhat.

The 3 voices are there because everyone except one other person from my project skiddodled and I have one possible person on hold, so it's made for 3 people.

Yay.


If I knew the Aussie word for "therapy," you had better believe i'd be recommending it.

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Old 2005-07-13, 12:43
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Diss'--Oh, you're one of those that thinks because something is a little out of the ordinary metaphorically the author needs therapy. Well, you go get poopy on someone else's parade then Mr. Conservative-pants. I bet you don't like Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds because it's metaphoric. I'm teasing.

I don't think it's a bad choice to use penguins if that's how you saw what you were writing about. And I was being sarcastic about the singalong bit, but that's cool. There's things in there that I'm sure mean a lot to you that unless we knew you personally we wouldn't understand. I still think it's cool.
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Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-07-13, 19:51
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Diss'--Oh, you're one of those that thinks because something is a little out of the ordinary metaphorically the author needs therapy. Well, you go get poopy on someone else's parade then Mr. Conservative-pants. I bet you don't like Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds because it's metaphoric. I'm teasing.

I don't think it's a bad choice to use penguins if that's how you saw what you were writing about. And I was being sarcastic about the singalong bit, but that's cool. There's things in there that I'm sure mean a lot to you that unless we knew you personally we wouldn't understand. I still think it's cool.


Haha. I was kidding, though.

Honestly, its fucking weird, with a hint of stupid, but thats just my dumbass opinion.
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Old 2005-07-14, 21:47
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Cock, if I'm not mistaken. Still want any?

*edit* i'm talking about her, not me.
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Old 2005-07-15, 04:25
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Nope, it was PMS.
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*High fives Broken Crimson*
Must have been one of those times when no one can do anything right and you feel like biting the first person that bats an eye or breathes around ya. I hate those times when I get super emotional, but it sometimes gets some good verses out.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-07-16, 10:41
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Nope, it was PMS.


Hahaha, still want some TD?

That justifies all of it then.
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this is awesome.
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Fosters is Australian for 'therapy.' However, since I seem to recall that BC's some kind of Slav, I'd recommend vodka and unfiltered cigarettes, applied first in the morning and then at regular intervals throughout the day.

Aside from the odd choice of penguinmen I like it. Word choices that seemed unnecessary at first look right on a second reading. The penguinmen even work well with everything aside from the references to geometry, which don't really have anything to do with them. But aside from that I won't much complain.
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Old 2005-07-17, 13:22
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Hahaha! Signature worthy.
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