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Old 2005-06-27, 17:26
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i wrote this for a lady i have been massively in love with for like the past 3 years. she is in virginia, and i am here.

why didnt i kiss you?
why didnt i ask?
why didnt i tell you,
such a simple task?
why didnt i try
when we had a chance?
so many questions
for my mind to dance around

why did i wait
'til i'm here and you're there
to tell you i love you
seems so unfair
to the both of us

you're a shot of summer
in a cold winter rain
just knowing you
makes me happy again
so much the same
and so far apart
i wanted to love
didnt know where to start
im so sorry
and ill live with regret
cus though i didnt have you
you're the best ive had yet

opportunity knocked
and ill never have a chance
to have my little emo girl
with her hippie boy pants

and im sorry
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Old 2005-06-27, 17:30
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Thats awesome, not in like dude thats awesome you lost a chick. But I dig the poetry. I have had the same feelings in a way though. Except I will never have a chance becasue I wont let myself. But I totally know where youre coming from on this.
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Old 2005-06-27, 18:22
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i didnt really lose her, i just happen to live on the other side of the country. she still digs me.
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Old 2005-06-27, 19:03
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Made in the shade then. You better let her know!
The only thing I didn't like about the piece was the very last line if it was to be a more audience-friendly piece, but since it's a personal piece, I'd leave it. Has she seen it? I think that little bit of humor with the hippie pants thing was really cool.

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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
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Old 2005-06-27, 19:08
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im sure u'll see her in the future. just dont freeze up, like in ur poem
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Old 2005-06-28, 11:01
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Made in the shade then. You better let her know!
The only thing I didn't like about the piece was the very last line if it was to be a more audience-friendly piece, but since it's a personal piece, I'd leave it. Has she seen it? I think that little bit of humor with the hippie pants thing was really cool.

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i thought the hippie pants line would make her giggle,

tanks fer the fizzeedback
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Old 2005-06-29, 14:37
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It made me giggle! Take things slowly before you decide to move for sure. It's a big step.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-06-29, 14:40
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Old 2005-06-29, 15:06
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Old 2005-06-29, 15:12
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yes. kvlt statvs has been revoked

unless you rename this piece

COLD MEMROIES OV FROZEN ROSES
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Old 2005-06-29, 16:21
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What would you rather have? Grim and necro points from these bozos or love points with the lady of your dreams?

You guys are just jealous.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-06-29, 16:45
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ladies of dreams allways fuck you over, thats something you learn after a couple of years as a player
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Old 2005-06-29, 17:24
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Nah, not if it's the right one. I never gave the time of day to a player.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-06-29, 18:18
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Old 2005-06-29, 18:38
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Well, I know what you're playing with, Tullie. And that unicorn was not happy you took that.
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-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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Old 2005-06-29, 21:52
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shes worth it, im not a player, and ill gain grim and necro points later, i havent written a good gorey song in a while, im due up for another
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Old 2005-06-29, 22:37
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im just teasing

i wouldnt dare post lyrics here.
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Why not tranny?

cus he's a pussy
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