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Old 2005-05-28, 09:42
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Fuck you and don't come around anymore

Every time, I hear your whiney voice
A thousand shards pierce my brain
Driving me closer to killing you
I donít care that youíre sad
I donít care about your girlfriend
I donít care about you at all
So fuck you and donít come around anymore

You thought itíd be cool to tell your stories
Pathetic triumphs in the art of futility
I care not for your victories
Or that you think youíre cool
I donít want a high five
Just so you can tell another tall tale
So fuck you and donít come around anymore.

What about you who can dish it out
But canít take a stick or a stone
What about you the king of lies,
Whose idiocy amplifies my rage
Iíll smash your face and laugh at the blood
Because itís all I can do to keep from killing you
So fuck you and donít come around anymore

You thought we were friends?
You were a tool, I used you, and now I abuse you
You thought I kept your secrets?
Every one in every town knows about your fallacies
So fuck you, fuck you, and fuck you some more
So fuck you and donít come around anymore
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Old 2005-05-28, 09:50
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Old 2005-05-28, 10:19
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someone's having a grudge
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Old 2005-05-29, 06:12
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I thought we were talking about breakfast buritos, not breakfast angst.
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Old 2005-05-29, 06:28
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Ooo, someone isn't a happy camper. There's only one word I dont' like and maybe it's personal preference but I'd change "shards" to splinters of glass. Shards sounds like larger pieces of a window, but to me, splinters sound like fragments that are everywhere and extrememly hard to remove or avoid.

I'm not real keen on using 'bad words' in pieces, but there's exceptions. This was one. And it could be taken seriously or humorously so that's a big plus. Good flow and wording. I loved the way you ended it too. Fed up and sputtering mad.
Nice one.
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